WK8: NYCSPITZ (5-2) vs. zygote (3-1) [zygote wins, 7-2.]

Vulgar · 11-29-2014, 09:43 PM

Zygote - This was neat stuff, I liked how you flipped NYC's own style on him, lol. I was feeling the descriptions and the small areas you tweak that make the verse function at a higher level. This was a championship level verse because you took the picture, made it your own and added a dragon hoard of personal spin to everything about it. Why write a verse when you can write a compact novel? came to mind.

NYCSPITZ - Very tightly written, and it was tight as well. Your rhyming was better than Zyg's but I thought his was smoother, overall. The beginning of the first stanza was a bit weaker than the rest of the verse which was fuckin' nice. I think you rushed the wording a little somewhat before you got your groove going. I'd have to say that's the difference of the battle: I liked both verses but I enjoyed all of Zyg's.

This battle was fire. No real loser here, this could've easily been a collab. Thanks for the read guys.

Vote - Zygote

11-29-2014, 09:43 PM	#7
Vulgar Razor-thin derision Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,422 Battle Record: 40-25 Accomplishments - OM HOF Champed - Fight Night LIV - Gimmick Battle League (2x) - Write Week II - Art of Writing League - Storytelling And Topical Invitational Tournament - STI - Haiku Writer Challenge - GWL Picture Challenge(2x) Rep Power: 49604320	Zygote - This was neat stuff, I liked how you flipped NYC's own style on him, lol. I was feeling the descriptions and the small areas you tweak that make the verse function at a higher level. This was a championship level verse because you took the picture, made it your own and added a dragon hoard of personal spin to everything about it. Why write a verse when you can write a compact novel? came to mind. NYCSPITZ - Very tightly written, and it was tight as well. Your rhyming was better than Zyg's but I thought his was smoother, overall. The beginning of the first stanza was a bit weaker than the rest of the verse which was fuckin' nice. I think you rushed the wording a little somewhat before you got your groove going. I'd have to say that's the difference of the battle: I liked both verses but I enjoyed all of Zyg's. This battle was fire. No real loser here, this could've easily been a collab. Thanks for the read guys. Vote - Zygote