Obnoxious Dave

Just Write · 04-09-2013, 11:14 PM

lol this was pretty enjoyable man.. that first half was just a steamroller of multi's and even though the scheme was repetative i enjoyed that first half more than the second (as far as technical goes). the plot was really good too, this was am unusual style which is actually great because who wants amother copycat rhymer you know. i did think it wrapped up rather quickly but we talked about that already lol. yea mam great job, i'll try to get to that other piece when i can man. peace

04-09-2013, 11:14 PM	#16
Just Write Senior Member Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 1,709 Battle Record: 9-12 Rep Power: 4997617	lol this was pretty enjoyable man.. that first half was just a steamroller of multi's and even though the scheme was repetative i enjoyed that first half more than the second (as far as technical goes). the plot was really good too, this was am unusual style which is actually great because who wants amother copycat rhymer you know. i did think it wrapped up rather quickly but we talked about that already lol. yea mam great job, i'll try to get to that other piece when i can man. peace