AOWL Week 8: Just Write (0-0) VS. fenix osiris (0-0) [FENIX OSIRIS WINS, 7-0.]

Red glare · 04-09-2013, 05:15 PM

Fenix; Endless onslaught. A forward march of malay. Very unrelenting piece. Every stanza was a demonstrative display of will power. With so many continuous themes in one piece; it becomes very difficult to bring any seriousness to it. You did somehow.
Just Write; ''Endless vision goggles that glisten; red dots in iraq' Dope line. Good aggressive flow for such a sad piece. If there was a 12 line limit - you'd win. I look forward to reading the rest of this piece in the open mic forum.
V/ Osiris

04-09-2013, 05:15 PM	#12
Red glare Senior Member Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 189 Battle Record: 7-9 Rep Power: 0	Fenix; Endless onslaught. A forward march of malay. Very unrelenting piece. Every stanza was a demonstrative display of will power. With so many continuous themes in one piece; it becomes very difficult to bring any seriousness to it. You did somehow. Just Write; ''Endless vision goggles that glisten; red dots in iraq' Dope line. Good aggressive flow for such a sad piece. If there was a 12 line limit - you'd win. I look forward to reading the rest of this piece in the open mic forum. V/ Osiris