Forbidden Tongue

Vulgar · 11-06-2014, 09:47 PM

I was glad to see you came back because writing is a great hobby to have...this one was more engaging than the last thing I read from you, if I'm remembering correctly. The slight subtleties in your ideas nudged them towards that 'object of interest' territory others might not be able to pull off. As a whole, there are still nuances you're not picking up on, moments you aren't capitalizing on. It was about censorship yet it didn't offer anything concretely theoretical; emphasis was placed on an issue, and you pondered it for a bit. As the reader, I recognized that - an unremarkable piece, but a step in the right direction.

Keep it up Story.

11-06-2014, 09:47 PM	#6
Vulgar Razor-thin derision Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,422 Battle Record: 40-25 Accomplishments - OM HOF Champed - Fight Night LIV - Gimmick Battle League (2x) - Write Week II - Art of Writing League - Storytelling And Topical Invitational Tournament - STI - Haiku Writer Challenge - GWL Picture Challenge(2x) Rep Power: 49604320	I was glad to see you came back because writing is a great hobby to have...this one was more engaging than the last thing I read from you, if I'm remembering correctly. The slight subtleties in your ideas nudged them towards that 'object of interest' territory others might not be able to pull off. As a whole, there are still nuances you're not picking up on, moments you aren't capitalizing on. It was about censorship yet it didn't offer anything concretely theoretical; emphasis was placed on an issue, and you pondered it for a bit. As the reader, I recognized that - an unremarkable piece, but a step in the right direction. Keep it up Story.