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11-04-2014, 08:31 AM
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Join Date: Jan 2013
Location: I live in Florida
Posts: 4,789
Battle Record: 3-8
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broken hearted girl
You were my king
You were my everything You were my heart You were my soul I can't live with out you i been thinking about you because I miss u |
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11-04-2014, 08:42 AM
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Arm the Homeless
Join Date: Jan 2013
Posts: 4,102
Battle Record: 22-24
Champed - Art of Writing League
Rep Power: 35079722 |
Dem feels...
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11-04-2014, 11:51 AM
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Senior Member
Join Date: Jan 2013
Location: I live in Florida
Posts: 4,789
Battle Record: 3-8
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Thanks
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11-04-2014, 11:53 AM
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Join Date: Jul 2013
Posts: 3,934
Battle Record: 3-3
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Unbelievable...the scheme is awesome, and content...WOW!!! never read anythin' like this before anywhere...brilliant stuff you silverback lookin' creature.
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11-04-2014, 11:58 AM
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Senior Member
Join Date: Jan 2013
Location: I live in Florida
Posts: 4,789
Battle Record: 3-8
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Thanks sweets
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11-04-2014, 12:01 PM
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Join Date: Jul 2013
Posts: 3,934
Battle Record: 3-3
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11-07-2014, 04:17 PM
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The Clown Prince
Join Date: Apr 2013
Posts: 5,046
Battle Record: 35-45
Champed - Art of Writing League
Rep Power: 59349682 |
Quote:
the words shower me with an emotion unknown to me before and I feel the pain... I understand the territorial betrayal that invaded the heart you poured into this page it makes me feel like I've been invited into a world made possible by your brooding your upset turmoil makes me want to grab a railroad spike and pierce my ears it's so saddening I feel your pain sister, the noobs can really take notes from this piece and grow from it 5 out of 5 bravo....brah....vo
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11-07-2014, 07:46 PM
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Razor-thin derision
Join Date: Jan 2013
Posts: 4,422
Battle Record: 40-25
Accomplishments - OM HOF
Champed - Fight Night LIV
- Gimmick Battle League (2x)
- Write Week II
- Art of Writing League
- Storytelling And Topical Invitational Tournament
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- Haiku Writer Challenge
- GWL Picture Challenge(2x)
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Exhilaratingly underrated piece.
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11-07-2014, 07:51 PM
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nok Su kow
Join Date: Jan 2013
Posts: 4,505
Battle Record: 1-1
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This was a bunch of horse shit. Your pussy look like the shit around the castle in Sleeping Beauty.
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11-07-2014, 08:06 PM
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Lime Life
Join Date: Jan 2013
Posts: 16,978
Battle Record: 30-41
Accomplishments - Only Slightly Retarded
Champed - Lyric Olympics
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Rep Power: 85235118 |
Ayo if this was for real I enjoyed it, it's simple yet something most people can relate to, something we all experience, writing to convey true emotion is admirable and I respect you for it, I hope things get better and you feel happier.
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He listens to voices inside of his mind
Explicit and poisonous violent crime.  |
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11-10-2014, 02:46 PM
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Senior Member
Join Date: Jan 2013
Location: I live in Florida
Posts: 4,789
Battle Record: 3-8
Rep Power: 55521419 |
Thanks everyone, I appreciate the feedbacks.
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