WK4 : NYCSpitz(2-1) vs. Dead man(2-1) -- NYC 7-2

Mr. J · 10-26-2014, 03:42 PM

Interesting....

NYC, Your verse starts out very nice and eventually gets so smooth
that its crazy how you put a twist to this topic and carry out an intricate piece
your grasp of your concept really draws a reader in, your vocab is well used
and you have a certain knack at just adding your twist as you progress
towards the halfway point I couldn't believe how you kept it up
At the end I was ready to read it a second time..but I digress

dead man, as usual you really brought an intriguing piece
you have a certain charm that blends well right into your verse
it enchants and often possesses a reader to beg for more
Here you do so well but end so abruptly which saddend me
its like reading a short story that's practically a haiku..
its nice but I need more...great job though

v/NYC, his verse just left an everlasting impression
both did great though

10-26-2014, 03:42 PM	#4
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	Interesting.... NYC, Your verse starts out very nice and eventually gets so smooth that its crazy how you put a twist to this topic and carry out an intricate piece your grasp of your concept really draws a reader in, your vocab is well used and you have a certain knack at just adding your twist as you progress towards the halfway point I couldn't believe how you kept it up At the end I was ready to read it a second time..but I digress dead man, as usual you really brought an intriguing piece you have a certain charm that blends well right into your verse it enchants and often possesses a reader to beg for more Here you do so well but end so abruptly which saddend me its like reading a short story that's practically a haiku.. its nice but I need more...great job though v/NYC, his verse just left an everlasting impression both did great though __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you