WK4 : Soulstice(1-1) vs. Adonis(1-0) -- Soulstice Wins Flawless

Three-Planes-Aligned · 10-26-2014, 03:35 PM

adonis - pretty uninspired flow brah, it was a staccato reading experience that had an unfortunate side-effect of making this seem LONGER than it actually was... the poetic airiness works better in other instances than developing plot imo. Imagery was well-wrought and fastened the narrative as such in it's mythological setting. Overall I'm stuck feeling that this needed to be spun more creatively.

soulstice - your off line count throws me yet again; it makes it read as if there's overdubs sometimes. Not saying it's arythmic, at least not always, it's just, to me, off-putting. Developing this sort of somber tone in a written you can do in your sleep and you handled the imagery with the delicate touch you always apply in such instances.

Hm, hard one... I was tilting towards giving it to adonis based on coherence alone, but I think Soulstice. did a little more visually and creatively so my vote goes to him (her?).

10-26-2014, 03:35 PM	#1
Three-Planes-Aligned Hyphenated Join Date: Apr 2014 Location: The Black Lodge Posts: 79 Battle Record: 7-8 Rep Power: 549513	adonis - pretty uninspired flow brah, it was a staccato reading experience that had an unfortunate side-effect of making this seem LONGER than it actually was... the poetic airiness works better in other instances than developing plot imo. Imagery was well-wrought and fastened the narrative as such in it's mythological setting. Overall I'm stuck feeling that this needed to be spun more creatively. soulstice - your off line count throws me yet again; it makes it read as if there's overdubs sometimes. Not saying it's arythmic, at least not always, it's just, to me, off-putting. Developing this sort of somber tone in a written you can do in your sleep and you handled the imagery with the delicate touch you always apply in such instances. Hm, hard one... I was tilting towards giving it to adonis based on coherence alone, but I think Soulstice. did a little more visually and creatively so my vote goes to him (her?).