W3 CONTENDER MATCH: Certain (2-0) vs. NYCSPITZ (2-0) -- Certain 4-2

kannon · 10-20-2014, 12:28 AM

NYC. I don't know if this was an original story, or if it's your retelling of a samurai movie or something. All the names and whatnot seemed a bit specific for this to not already be a story. I could be completely wrong though, who knows. You do. But I digress. Cool story. Obviously, your flow was kind of all over the place. But this read fairly smooth otherwise. I mean, it got kinda weird when the dude was fighting a tree. but you know, otherwise it was cool. I like that after destroying the entire clan, he's just like "bitch, gimme some grub and a slut, and I'm good." Overall, pretty dope. Really visual. All that good stuff. My only real complaint was trying to match your story to the topic. In a piece that is supposed to be about standards of happiness, you wrote about a japanese dude killing a rival clan...

Certain. Immediately I had a slight cringe at the "annoying" rhyme. But thats minor. Flow is dope so far. The protagonist is an introvert, doesnt really find joy in the things most people do, would rather enjoy his alone time while eating a burrito. I digs it. Simple, yet effective. Schemes weren't mind blowing, but still carried well, and the flow stayed solid throughout. I like the simplicity in the person's life that he knows what makes him happy and he doesn't try to be or do anything that doesn't fit that standard. So many times people try to conform to a standard to be accepted, but he'd rather be happy with himself than be accepted, even if it means that he's happy alone. Overall, this was a bit simple, but like I said, very effective.

This is kind of a tough one, because on one hand, I kinda feel like I'm leaning towards NYC's story more. But Certain had better mechanics, and stuck way more to the topic. I'm still having a really tough time relating NYC's verse to the topic he presented. Plus as light hearted as it was, it was full of wit and had a great wrap up (PUN INTENDED).

I'ma tip the scale ever so slightly to Certain.

10-20-2014, 12:28 AM	#7
kannon kickthekan Join Date: May 2014 Location: fresh coast Posts: 1,204 Battle Record: 9-6 Champed - The Mic Check Rep Power: 22752198	NYC. I don't know if this was an original story, or if it's your retelling of a samurai movie or something. All the names and whatnot seemed a bit specific for this to not already be a story. I could be completely wrong though, who knows. You do. But I digress. Cool story. Obviously, your flow was kind of all over the place. But this read fairly smooth otherwise. I mean, it got kinda weird when the dude was fighting a tree. but you know, otherwise it was cool. I like that after destroying the entire clan, he's just like "bitch, gimme some grub and a slut, and I'm good." Overall, pretty dope. Really visual. All that good stuff. My only real complaint was trying to match your story to the topic. In a piece that is supposed to be about standards of happiness, you wrote about a japanese dude killing a rival clan... Certain. Immediately I had a slight cringe at the "annoying" rhyme. But thats minor. Flow is dope so far. The protagonist is an introvert, doesnt really find joy in the things most people do, would rather enjoy his alone time while eating a burrito. I digs it. Simple, yet effective. Schemes weren't mind blowing, but still carried well, and the flow stayed solid throughout. I like the simplicity in the person's life that he knows what makes him happy and he doesn't try to be or do anything that doesn't fit that standard. So many times people try to conform to a standard to be accepted, but he'd rather be happy with himself than be accepted, even if it means that he's happy alone. Overall, this was a bit simple, but like I said, very effective. This is kind of a tough one, because on one hand, I kinda feel like I'm leaning towards NYC's story more. But Certain had better mechanics, and stuck way more to the topic. I'm still having a really tough time relating NYC's verse to the topic he presented. Plus as light hearted as it was, it was full of wit and had a great wrap up (PUN INTENDED). I'ma tip the scale ever so slightly to Certain. __________________ lnk.bio/kickthekan FIRSTCLASS