W3: Soulstice (1-0) vs. Witty (1-0) -- Witty 4-2

Vulgar · 10-19-2014, 12:03 AM

Soulstice - The narrator's voice was unmistakably a male's, I mean, the way that men reason was ever present in this, enveloping it. I could taste the desire that the main character felt for this woman, to the point where I was injecting instances of past desires into the story to maximize the effect. It was well written and didn't try to masquerade as anything other than what it was: a thought provoking love piece. It reminded me of something oats might write, but of course you wrote it in your own way and the approaches wouldn't be similar. The subject matter, a relationship with high hopes reduced to dissolution, watered down romance floating down a waterway... it was good work.

Witty - This was very easy to read with instances of advanced content, which clues me into the fact that you're capable of being a topical powerhouse when you want to - the only thing in your way is minor wording mishaps, and the build up of rust from not competing. Nice interpretation of the topic. A homicidal take on a fairy tale redux.

My gut here tells me to go with Soulstice, whose verse struck a chord with me. This was a close battle.

Vote - Soulstice

10-19-2014, 12:03 AM	#1
Vulgar Razor-thin derision Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,422 Battle Record: 40-25 Accomplishments - OM HOF Champed - Fight Night LIV - Gimmick Battle League (2x) - Write Week II - Art of Writing League - Storytelling And Topical Invitational Tournament - STI - Haiku Writer Challenge - GWL Picture Challenge(2x) Rep Power: 49604320	Soulstice - The narrator's voice was unmistakably a male's, I mean, the way that men reason was ever present in this, enveloping it. I could taste the desire that the main character felt for this woman, to the point where I was injecting instances of past desires into the story to maximize the effect. It was well written and didn't try to masquerade as anything other than what it was: a thought provoking love piece. It reminded me of something oats might write, but of course you wrote it in your own way and the approaches wouldn't be similar. The subject matter, a relationship with high hopes reduced to dissolution, watered down romance floating down a waterway... it was good work. Witty - This was very easy to read with instances of advanced content, which clues me into the fact that you're capable of being a topical powerhouse when you want to - the only thing in your way is minor wording mishaps, and the build up of rust from not competing. Nice interpretation of the topic. A homicidal take on a fairy tale redux. My gut here tells me to go with Soulstice, whose verse struck a chord with me. This was a close battle. Vote - Soulstice Last edited by Vulgar; 10-19-2014 at 12:17 AM.