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[theMuzzl3]

You dropped some dope lines for a battle situation. Way better than I can do and I've been trying for a month (not specifically on that, but writing in general).

My advice is to use more word play, which I recently looked up:

http://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=wordplay

That may help -- and I may have missed some word plays where things had double meaning in your verse... I am not criticizing your writing at all.

In fact, I have a hit list that I'd love to hand to you!