WK2 : Greed(0-1) vs. Innovator(0-1) - Greed 6-0

Three-Planes-Aligned · 10-12-2014, 01:41 PM

Greed - in-character this works really nice with a very authentic verbiage. Now, there's a coin-flip's chance you'll write something very similiar without the topic matching up too well and I'll be less impressed in retrospect but overall, I thought this was a breeze. Dem flows tight yo.

Innovator - Nope, did not like (which might not be much of a blow since I'm guessing 'had no time sorry' wasn't part of the verse). You know what it is man - this is almost too short to critique, no development or overarching theme to take a stab at. Your wording seems fairly solid, I'd like to see it expressed within the frame of an entire piece.

No surprises, Vote: Greed

CopyPat · 10-12-2014, 05:33 PM

again another good topic that really didn't get the verses i was hoping for to come out of it..

greed had a pretty solid verse, technically. the flow was good, vocab ok etc. but this was basically just a flex, felt like an om drop. i can see how it relates to the quote but damn.. so much more coulda been done with it

inno - rushed ur shit again... that aint gonna cut it. there just wasn't anything here, im sure u weren't expecting anything with that drop though? i guess props for not no showing but this didn't really help ur cause anyways..

Greed did just enough to win which wasn't much to be honest. you wrote an ok verse but the relation to the topic wasn't fully hitting..
you both are gonna need to step it up going forward. if u get matched up against one of the vets they'll crush efforts like this

V:greed

10-12-2014, 05:33 PM	#2
CopyPat Mic Check Join Date: Mar 2013 Location: Calgary Alberta Canada Posts: 708 Battle Record: 13-10 Rep Power: 3742225	again another good topic that really didn't get the verses i was hoping for to come out of it.. greed had a pretty solid verse, technically. the flow was good, vocab ok etc. but this was basically just a flex, felt like an om drop. i can see how it relates to the quote but damn.. so much more coulda been done with it inno - rushed ur shit again... that aint gonna cut it. there just wasn't anything here, im sure u weren't expecting anything with that drop though? i guess props for not no showing but this didn't really help ur cause anyways.. Greed did just enough to win which wasn't much to be honest. you wrote an ok verse but the relation to the topic wasn't fully hitting.. you both are gonna need to step it up going forward. if u get matched up against one of the vets they'll crush efforts like this V:greed __________________ My syllable count approximately a billion, bounce. You cannot compete.

10-12-2014, 01:41 PM	#1
Three-Planes-Aligned Hyphenated Join Date: Apr 2014 Location: The Black Lodge Posts: 79 Battle Record: 7-8 Rep Power: 549513	Greed - in-character this works really nice with a very authentic verbiage. Now, there's a coin-flip's chance you'll write something very similiar without the topic matching up too well and I'll be less impressed in retrospect but overall, I thought this was a breeze. Dem flows tight yo. Innovator - Nope, did not like (which might not be much of a blow since I'm guessing 'had no time sorry' wasn't part of the verse). You know what it is man - this is almost too short to critique, no development or overarching theme to take a stab at. Your wording seems fairly solid, I'd like to see it expressed within the frame of an entire piece. No surprises, Vote: Greed