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Old 10-12-2014, 01:40 PM   #7
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3pay - This was very descriptive. You explained the soul of a man, a bad man. A heartless person who is a drunken druggie living his life by the induce. Rhyming as always was on point, the connection to topic was evident as you explained a man who enjoys his way wayward way of living. The thing I liked most was it ended, and there was no sense of redemption or happiness. It just ended as it began, a simple explanation to a lost soul who doesn't care to be found.

Frank - Some weird phrasing "bluffing on chumming...Triumphing Hushing"... The story was cool and i've noticed when you write a story you lose your place from time to time, but this was more cohesive then some of the others such as the Jeter verse etc. I liked the setting, because you did give us one, but I feel you could have added a few more details in the actual room, but still, you did a good enough job that I had a clear image in my head of what and where was taking place.


Interesting battle here, close, but I still have a clear cut winner.

V/3pa

I feel like he had the better description and grasp on language, both painted a clear image in my head and both executed topic.
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