2AM. It was 2PM. But I slept 12 hours.

Pharaohs Army · 10-11-2014, 10:16 PM

pure talent. top notch, those first two stanzas. in the third, the content is good, but from a technical aspect i can tell you freestyled or free versed. which is okay, but it seemed a vastly different kind of flow than the first two stanzas.
some very creative similes/ phraseology, particularly with respect to a significant other. seems authentic, translating thoughts&feelings to the page. lol but if you told me u jus made it up out of nowhere on the spot that also wouldn't surprise me either. anyway, i think you need to always use your best effort because it will mean great things.

10-11-2014, 10:16 PM	#1
Pharaohs Army Banned Join Date: Aug 2014 Posts: 2,956 Battle Record: 6 - 14 Rep Power: 0	pure talent. top notch, those first two stanzas. in the third, the content is good, but from a technical aspect i can tell you freestyled or free versed. which is okay, but it seemed a vastly different kind of flow than the first two stanzas. some very creative similes/ phraseology, particularly with respect to a significant other. seems authentic, translating thoughts&feelings to the page. lol but if you told me u jus made it up out of nowhere on the spot that also wouldn't surprise me either. anyway, i think you need to always use your best effort because it will mean great things.