WK2 : Certain(1-0) vs. Deadman(1-0) -- Certain wins flawless 5-0

Vulgar · 10-11-2014, 07:26 PM

dead man - Not bad for a quick effort and the interpretation was cool. Just not enough here to comment on.

Certain - Inventive rhyming and the narration was on point. More rapid fire than usual which set the piece off. I got lost with the characters in the beginning but that's because it's easy for me to get lost. The different characters could've had differentiating qualities, though keeping it general is probably the go-to choice for a story overview. It'd naturally be more intimate if this were prose and you had 10x the amount of paragraphs to work with. Overall, good work.

Vote - Certain

10-11-2014, 07:26 PM	#1
Vulgar Razor-thin derision Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,422 Battle Record: 40-25 Accomplishments - OM HOF Champed - Fight Night LIV - Gimmick Battle League (2x) - Write Week II - Art of Writing League - Storytelling And Topical Invitational Tournament - STI - Haiku Writer Challenge - GWL Picture Challenge(2x) Rep Power: 49604320	dead man - Not bad for a quick effort and the interpretation was cool. Just not enough here to comment on. Certain - Inventive rhyming and the narration was on point. More rapid fire than usual which set the piece off. I got lost with the characters in the beginning but that's because it's easy for me to get lost. The different characters could've had differentiating qualities, though keeping it general is probably the go-to choice for a story overview. It'd naturally be more intimate if this were prose and you had 10x the amount of paragraphs to work with. Overall, good work. Vote - Certain