Paragraph Re-up

Zen · 04-05-2013, 01:44 PM

Pretty good little piece here man. I've only seen another person on here use the paragraph style lol. But really I can't actually see anything wrong with this. The flow was perfect, it rolled right off my tongue and I actually think putting it in a paragraph was a better idea and worked great for this. Props. If I was gonna give a little advice the only thing I would say is use more creative vocabulary because you have everything else down perfectly. Nice drop man I'm gonna peep your next drop for sure.

04-05-2013, 01:44 PM	#2
Zen Arm the Homeless Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,102 Battle Record: 22-24 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 35079722	Pretty good little piece here man. I've only seen another person on here use the paragraph style lol. But really I can't actually see anything wrong with this. The flow was perfect, it rolled right off my tongue and I actually think putting it in a paragraph was a better idea and worked great for this. Props. If I was gonna give a little advice the only thing I would say is use more creative vocabulary because you have everything else down perfectly. Nice drop man I'm gonna peep your next drop for sure.