DEAD MAN - OXYGEN BLUES

CopyPat · 04-05-2013, 01:48 AM

This is sick man. Never seen u before but i'm feelin this. Were u on netcees aswell??

i'm guessing that keeping one rhyme for a whole verse isn't your "normal" style?? this was impressive but does get a little old if this is how u always drop. but seemed like it was done this one time on purpose so well done i liked it.

try to repent or die where you rest. writing for stress
cyanide vitamin X - Mr. Myers presents: macabre microchip sense

^that opener was flames, probly my fav part of the whole thing. super dope, got me hooked right in

only criticism i would have is that yes the flow was redunk and there was some substance to it but by the end it almost felt like u were slaving to the scheme rather than actually just saying what u wanted to. like there wasn't really sentences but just nouns and adjectives of rhyming words like:

lying in beds. white sheets stained with their myelin in shreds
lighting the cess, copa cabana, island events
nitrogen dipped white owls, high powered, hydrogen vents
hybrid of flesh, soda cans, bronchitis and strep
lighters to flick, connections to make, vaginas to wet
migrant dimensional, we're here for now, the cycle is set
psychic ascents to higher frequencies. Disciple the dense,
Blacketh the blind, Gawdian grandiose, entitled to flex

Feel me??? would rather see you form a thought or finish a real sentence AND still keep the dope flow/scheming .

Anyways absolutely zero hate for you man. just droppin some hopefully constructive feed for ya cause honestly i really dug this flow and i like ur style alot, rhyme wise and i can tell u have talent so ur shit will be super dope if u put ur mind to it. really lookin forward to more drops from ya. check out my piece called too legit if u got a chance i could use some feeds. stay up man i'll be lookin out for ur stuff for sure

04-05-2013, 01:48 AM	#1
CopyPat Mic Check Join Date: Mar 2013 Location: Calgary Alberta Canada Posts: 708 Battle Record: 13-10 Rep Power: 3742225	This is sick man. Never seen u before but i'm feelin this. Were u on netcees aswell?? i'm guessing that keeping one rhyme for a whole verse isn't your "normal" style?? this was impressive but does get a little old if this is how u always drop. but seemed like it was done this one time on purpose so well done i liked it. try to repent or die where you rest. writing for stress cyanide vitamin X - Mr. Myers presents: macabre microchip sense ^that opener was flames, probly my fav part of the whole thing. super dope, got me hooked right in only criticism i would have is that yes the flow was redunk and there was some substance to it but by the end it almost felt like u were slaving to the scheme rather than actually just saying what u wanted to. like there wasn't really sentences but just nouns and adjectives of rhyming words like: lying in beds. white sheets stained with their myelin in shreds lighting the cess, copa cabana, island events nitrogen dipped white owls, high powered, hydrogen vents hybrid of flesh, soda cans, bronchitis and strep lighters to flick, connections to make, vaginas to wet migrant dimensional, we're here for now, the cycle is set psychic ascents to higher frequencies. Disciple the dense, Blacketh the blind, Gawdian grandiose, entitled to flex Feel me??? would rather see you form a thought or finish a real sentence AND still keep the dope flow/scheming . Anyways absolutely zero hate for you man. just droppin some hopefully constructive feed for ya cause honestly i really dug this flow and i like ur style alot, rhyme wise and i can tell u have talent so ur shit will be super dope if u put ur mind to it. really lookin forward to more drops from ya. check out my piece called too legit if u got a chance i could use some feeds. stay up man i'll be lookin out for ur stuff for sure