Week 1: Camp Bell vs. YDK [Camp bell wins, 7-4.]

Adonis · 10-05-2014, 01:11 AM

Camp - Good pace and flow coupled with a decent amount of emotion. Charchter build up could have been much better, explaining who she is and the dude a bit before jumping fist first into the ol' eye socket ya dig? It was short and to the point, I guess that's the best thing about this verse. That probably came out wrong. I mean some, or a lot of verses lack that I guess, but you went from 0 to 60 in under 30 lines, kudos.

My favorite first place loser - This gone be a tough vote. You too had this verse move in quick fashion, finishing just as fast as you began. Solid flow, no real quarrels there. I didn't like the brevity in the sense you jumped from coke sniffer, to horrible dr to I'm the wedding and he's dead. So much detail was missed there. I did however appreciate the sly innuendo's Ie. "Stomped on"... as I took that as a coke reference in the Overdose as it was stomped on and altered (being another innuendo) to killing via it not being a good product.

I had every intention of voting for CampBell after reading them each. But I just talked my self through YDK's verse and feel like I understand more for it.

Voting YDK

His verse had some sense on hidden message that might be wishful thinking, but I'm sure it was on purpose.

10-05-2014, 01:11 AM	#12
Adonis Tsk Tsk Join Date: Feb 2013 Location: Beer Goggles Posts: 4,834 Battle Record: 36-34 Champed - Lime Green Poetry Association - NFL Pick'em 2016-17 Rep Power: 9946449	Camp - Good pace and flow coupled with a decent amount of emotion. Charchter build up could have been much better, explaining who she is and the dude a bit before jumping fist first into the ol' eye socket ya dig? It was short and to the point, I guess that's the best thing about this verse. That probably came out wrong. I mean some, or a lot of verses lack that I guess, but you went from 0 to 60 in under 30 lines, kudos. My favorite first place loser - This gone be a tough vote. You too had this verse move in quick fashion, finishing just as fast as you began. Solid flow, no real quarrels there. I didn't like the brevity in the sense you jumped from coke sniffer, to horrible dr to I'm the wedding and he's dead. So much detail was missed there. I did however appreciate the sly innuendo's Ie. "Stomped on"... as I took that as a coke reference in the Overdose as it was stomped on and altered (being another innuendo) to killing via it not being a good product. I had every intention of voting for CampBell after reading them each. But I just talked my self through YDK's verse and feel like I understand more for it. Voting YDK His verse had some sense on hidden message that might be wishful thinking, but I'm sure it was on purpose. __________________ I'm tryna fuck like A-don-is TUPAC SHAKUR