Week 1: NYCSPITZ vs. Objective [NYCSPITZ wins, 9-1.]

Mr. J · 10-03-2014, 06:43 PM

This should have been my first pick to vote on in my return

I felt both writers had a real blanced.....type of view on their topic
shout out to Objective and spelling errors alike, but I enjoyed both verses
and had he came a little stronger in his piece and a little more dedicated
I may have voted for him here, but where you set the tone you lost the...
what's the word I'm looking for....balance of the piece and your overall written
well not overall, just more...I don't know, you should have done more...
that's what I'm trying to say, and for me to critique NYC right now....
well I could do so but let's just go ahead and give him the vote shall we?
a word of advice @Objective, work on finishing what you started...
it would do you well in the end

v/NYC

10-03-2014, 06:43 PM	#3
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	This should have been my first pick to vote on in my return I felt both writers had a real blanced.....type of view on their topic shout out to Objective and spelling errors alike, but I enjoyed both verses and had he came a little stronger in his piece and a little more dedicated I may have voted for him here, but where you set the tone you lost the... what's the word I'm looking for....balance of the piece and your overall written well not overall, just more...I don't know, you should have done more... that's what I'm trying to say, and for me to critique NYC right now.... well I could do so but let's just go ahead and give him the vote shall we? a word of advice @Objective, work on finishing what you started... it would do you well in the end v/NYC __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you