For rhymes sake.

AndyHiro · 09-28-2014, 05:57 AM

In my opinion this is not as bad as everyone is saying. I see some swag in this drop and I'm sure if everyone was high as I am right now then they could see it too.

Like if this was an actual audio freestyle off the top it prolly would have gotten you props rather than the lackluster reaction your getting.

Anyway cool flow to this. Your wording is a bit awkward in places but I do get the general idea of what you are trying to say. An example is

'I'mma force movin the swords movement to scorn humans
Get torn in two with horrid Fluid spewin from pours stupid'

Like the imagery is there and I get the gist but swords don't really scorn humans. Unless of course it is a bad tempered sentient sword. I dunno I'm sure it exists in some inane fantasy RPG out there somewhere.

Also horrid fluid line is suppose to imply shedding blood but you say "spewing from pours stupid". I'm sure you meant pores in which the only thing that should come from that is sweat or pimples or you know things that actually come out of pores.

Unless you actually meant the act of pouring. In which the line "spewing from pours" sounds kinda like you are trying to make yourself a glass of milk but you have like Parkinson's or something and your making like big fucking mess and shit.

Keep elevating bro.

09-28-2014, 05:57 AM	#16
AndyHiro Yeah Im kinda like that Join Date: Sep 2014 Posts: 107 Rep Power: 0	In my opinion this is not as bad as everyone is saying. I see some swag in this drop and I'm sure if everyone was high as I am right now then they could see it too. Like if this was an actual audio freestyle off the top it prolly would have gotten you props rather than the lackluster reaction your getting. Anyway cool flow to this. Your wording is a bit awkward in places but I do get the general idea of what you are trying to say. An example is 'I'mma force movin the swords movement to scorn humans Get torn in two with horrid Fluid spewin from pours stupid' Like the imagery is there and I get the gist but swords don't really scorn humans. Unless of course it is a bad tempered sentient sword. I dunno I'm sure it exists in some inane fantasy RPG out there somewhere. Also horrid fluid line is suppose to imply shedding blood but you say "spewing from pours stupid". I'm sure you meant pores in which the only thing that should come from that is sweat or pimples or you know things that actually come out of pores. Unless you actually meant the act of pouring. In which the line "spewing from pours" sounds kinda like you are trying to make yourself a glass of milk but you have like Parkinson's or something and your making like big fucking mess and shit. Keep elevating bro.