[Text Contenders] Blanco Bishop [VS] Jilti [jilti wins]

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jilti: I thought the BBC One line was really clever. But there were a lot of really played concepts here: stabbing gash, Barbie, Friday the 13th, kick out of this, Nintendo. What carried you through was strong wording. This was a very readable verse with strong cadence and solid wording. It could have been harsher or more comedic for more impact, but it was a solid read. Still, I only had you with one line that landed fully, and the Joan Rivers line had potential but was a bit too direct.

Blanco Bishop: You really disincentivized my reading with those four lines. Your wording is way too drawn out, jamming in extra phrases for no reason, and the first two punches were flat-out terrible. The wording was an issue throughout, but you did have a couple nice personal disses there in the middle. Then you went back to generic, and the thing about generic punchlines is that wording is so much more important with them because no idea (especially lines about having sex with your opponent's girlfriend) is original. The closer could have been something but took way too long to get there. That's the general problem here. You write like Gamble but actually have occasional good ideas. Stop writing like Gamble. Tighten your shit up. This verse was tough to get through, and your few good concepts didn't connect as a result.

Vote: jilti