AOWL Week 7: Vinzr (3-1) vs. Que (0-0)-- [QUE WINS 9-2]

Venom · 04-03-2013, 03:22 PM

pretty much agree with what's been said

Vinzr - you had some nice imagery in parts, but your take on the topic just came across a bit basic.. the key words in caps is an amateur trick & you've been around long enough to do better. still, these lines impressed:

The air around me* sparks with colors that spell the word beauty
This new image I’ve manufactured looks like it does suit me

^ I thought that was a nice way of portraying a coming out of a depressive state.

Que - flowed great, rhymes were disgusting in parts, and you had a sick take on the topic. completely left-field and blew me away. quotes:

The ones that bark as if wolves were released to ravage
When Good meets the savage its too much for the meek to manage!
Happiness is mother natures weakest bandage
Were built to re-open wounds and repeat the damage!
Our greatest challenge will be to shape our talents
and invade the grey lands that create the balance!

^ that whole section was straight fire. you bringing it.

vote Que

04-03-2013, 03:22 PM	#20
Venom Member Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 47 Rep Power: 38	pretty much agree with what's been said Vinzr - you had some nice imagery in parts, but your take on the topic just came across a bit basic.. the key words in caps is an amateur trick & you've been around long enough to do better. still, these lines impressed: The air around me* sparks with colors that spell the word beauty This new image I’ve manufactured looks like it does suit me ^ I thought that was a nice way of portraying a coming out of a depressive state. Que - flowed great, rhymes were disgusting in parts, and you had a sick take on the topic. completely left-field and blew me away. quotes: The ones that bark as if wolves were released to ravage When Good meets the savage its too much for the meek to manage! Happiness is mother natures weakest bandage Were built to re-open wounds and repeat the damage! Our greatest challenge will be to shape our talents and invade the grey lands that create the balance! ^ that whole section was straight fire. you bringing it. vote Que __________________ 致命 Tearing up vets, shouting abuse Don’t respect my elders, I drowned 'em in the Fountain of Youth