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Old 09-15-2014, 03:10 PM   #11
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Nothing you release is positive, negative note? I punch heads
Cos we'll never see P-sacks dope unless it's failing a drug test

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Tellem "I lost my limbs but if i show u my dick ull want it in ur mouth in a sec"
once i send them a pic of daddy long leg they start to bug out on the web



Beans: "That shit was choppy as fuck! Ya can't cut hype with beans kid
So if U ever think you gotta edge in this? I'll use it to slice U to pieces" is overused concept beans.

PTS: "everyday i wake up under the weather n need a pick me up to write glossy schemes
im too sick to be around you n im highly doubtful u want to end up coughy beans"

thought this was a cool concept. could have been worded better though imo to make it hit harder.

overall, both were okay. but if i had to chose one that had less lines that didn't miss it would be Beans
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