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Old 09-02-2014, 10:50 AM   #1
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Default THE ANOMOLY CONSTRAINER COEFFICIENT

Yes.

Fluid system physics, mathematical entropy and enthalpy
Visits from critics of the vessel nonsensical’s telepathy?
Just kidding, the crux is that anything is possible
Just as pain is subjective we invent our every obstacle.
Now then, we exist in a system where anything that can happen…can
This is why there always needs to be a contingency when you….plan
To be an anomaly is to be in possession of something outside of the system
Such as an artifact out of time, or even a man free in mind while in prison
Envision the discussion and linear functions of quantum causality….
Psych. You can’t because they swerve and appear in this dimension retroactively.
Take the time traveler, there can be only so many at one “time” and “place”
Take your own mind and blow it when u think of the size of space
The continuum follows the Word. The overall plan of the script,
Still in yet as with any fabric, the right force and direction can cause a rip.
So what does the system do? Does it Donnie darko?
Or even this out of place artifact disguised as bizarre flow?
Sighs, lights Newport, puts hands on hips
They are all asleep aboard their sunken battle ships.
Still in yet, allow the message to resonate….
Anomalies must be controlled, extolled to exacerbate
There is a remnant from old who can code at a faster rate,
But even they cannot display the way to crash the gate

For the system has an ingenious method of constraining anomalies
There is an allotted balance allowed, a literal space for remainders

Numbers that are so big they are small, numbers so small they are huge
To liken this concept to your brain brings forth the force of deluge.
Dispel fools and propel clues for the clever to search out
Hide them under the ocean and make their motors burn out
Because every anomaly is dangerous but the system allows a set number
Their unique code out codes the code but unknown is the main tumbler
Which sets anomalies on anomalies to destroy anomalies with anomalies
That is why serendipity and synhronicity are visible when sought with ease
The problem is that when one destroys the other, the one will still remain
And another is needed to be brought forth to quell the one’s strain.
So the coefficient in it’s simplest is a never ending system of balance
Remainders divided and coincided with grace provided from God’s palace
In closing if you time travel, be prepared to die by an accident
Take solace in knowing that the accident was on purpose in light of all the facts I sent.
Correlation does not equal causation. This is knowledge used to the benefit
And I am sorry if this leaves your brain poached like eggs benedict.
Anomalies are sent to destroy previous anomalies, the constrainer coefficient
This helps explain omniscient’s holy mission.
Word.
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Old 09-02-2014, 11:53 AM   #2
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Such as an artifact out of time, or even a man free in mind while in prison-

deep^^

The continuum follows the Word. The overall plan of the script,
Still in yet as with any fabric, the right force and direction can cause a rip.
-uh huh

In closing if you time travel, be prepared to die by an accident
Take solace in knowing that the accident was on purpose in light of all the facts I sent.
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I liked the 1st section the best.....lotta deepness and theories being explored...2nd was a lil' over the top for my personal style....But you def, puttin' ya self out there coming up wit' some shit to make people think...

Polished concept...Really felt your were teaching with thiz piece....

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To be an anomaly is to be in possession of something outside of the system
Such as an artifact out of time, or even a man free in mind while in prison
Envision the discussion and linear functions of quantum causality….
Psych. You can’t because they swerve and appear in this dimension retroactively.
Take the time traveler, there can be only so many at one “time” and “place”
Take your own mind and blow it when u think of the size of space


i like this because it basically sums up my outlook on life.

couple of bars afterwards felt like filler with the donnie darko/dark flow but picked back up

Numbers that are so big they are small, numbers so small they are huge
To liken this concept to your brain brings forth the force of deluge.
Dispel fools and propel clues for the clever to search out
Hide them under the ocean and make their motors burn out

a couple of bars afterwards again i felt like you were reaching to stretch the rhyme scheme, you have sick ideas and obviously they flow freely but dont throw them together so forcefully
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Old 09-02-2014, 03:23 PM   #5
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To be an anomaly is to be in possession of something outside of the system
Such as an artifact out of time, or even a man free in mind while in prison
Envision the discussion and linear functions of quantum causality….
Psych. You can’t because they swerve and appear in this dimension retroactively.
Take the time traveler, there can be only so many at one “time” and “place”
Take your own mind and blow it when u think of the size of space


i like this because it basically sums up my outlook on life.

couple of bars afterwards felt like filler with the donnie darko/dark flow but picked back up

Numbers that are so big they are small, numbers so small they are huge
To liken this concept to your brain brings forth the force of deluge.
Dispel fools and propel clues for the clever to search out
Hide them under the ocean and make their motors burn out

a couple of bars afterwards again i felt like you were reaching to stretch the rhyme scheme, you have sick ideas and obviously they flow freely but dont throw them together so forcefully

fair enough, thanks for taking the time to feed bruv.
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no worries. i dont have to tell you you know what you're doing, with about 30 minutes more time on the same amount of bars this could have been way better though
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no worries. i dont have to tell you you know what you're doing, with about 30 minutes more time on the same amount of bars this could have been way better though
also fair. Thank you sir.
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no worries. take it on board next time you write. i'm taking my own advice to you on board right now for myself
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I can't help but say, this whole thing made me think of the movie jumper

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Fair enough. Thank you for taking time out to read it. In a way it could be likened unto that...how he ends up killing himself. yeah.
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This is what makes you, you, and I'm no psychologist but I've learned a couple of things about you through your writing. If I'm wrong, it's because... well, I'm wrong, so bear with me. You're a person who prides himself on his accomplishments and the books he's read. You believe in your religion so much that you've sought out science to mend the loose strands left by a sole doctrine - now you have some microcosmic ammo to back up your position/stance too. Mix these elements together and you have a piece that starts off with heavy vocabulary words in the first line, enough to make me wince, tbh. You recovered though and settled into the rest of the verse naturally. I have no qualms beyond, maybe the first three lines. I didn't like how you said "Just kidding" - I didn't know you were kidding to begin with, unless I'm missing a point of humor. The second line was honestly like a bad Star Wars movie and didn't fit with the rest of the content.

What I took away from the central theme was anomalies, similar to Neo's identity in The Matrix, being an exception to the rule of consciousness, being a glitch but not really a glitch, being a symptom of a system that's overdue for reboot or alteration. Mathematics, the scale of the universe, and even multiple dimensions. Anomalies being sent to destroy other anomalies I don't really get. Are you referring to metaphysical hiccups, messianic figures, contradictions or moments of deja vu, as those embattled anomalies? I didn't get that part. God being a mathematician in the cosmos, working in mysterious ways, but bound by the language of numbers? This is why I'm neutral about religion, because I consider the truth to be less simple than we predict it is; I feel it must be incomprehensible, but that's my view on it.

All in all, it was solidly written and you surprised me by controlling your inner urge to go on a vocabulary spree or interrupt the stream of your approach. I've seen your work take tumbles when you start going with multiple rhyme schemes and lose track (and lose the reader) by initiating a rapid tangent. Last interpretation: God is indivisible? I don't know. Thanks for the read, good work.

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This is what makes you, you, and I'm no psychologist but I've learned a couple of things about you through your writing. If I'm wrong, it's because... well, I'm wrong, so bear with me. You're a person who prides himself on his accomplishments and the books he's read. You believe in your religion so much that you've sought out science to mend the loose strands left by a sole doctrine - now you have some microcosmic ammo to back up your position/stance too. Mix these elements together and you have a piece that starts off with heavy vocabulary words in the first line, enough to make me wince, tbh. You recovered though and settled into the rest of the verse naturally. I have no qualms beyond, maybe the first three lines. I didn't like how you said "Just kidding" - I didn't know you were kidding to begin with, unless I'm missing a point of humor. The second line was honestly like a bad Star Wars movie and didn't fit with the rest of the content.

What I took away from the central theme was anomalies, similar to Neo's identity in The Matrix, being an exception to the rule of consciousness, being a glitch but not really a glitch, being a symptom of a system that's overdue for reboot or alteration. Mathematics, the scale of the universe, and even multiple dimensions. Anomalies being sent to destroy other anomalies I don't really get. Are you referring to metaphysical hiccups, messianic figures, contradictions or moments of deja vu, as those embattled anomalies? I didn't get that part. God being a mathematician in the cosmos, working in mysterious ways, but bound by the language of numbers? This is why I'm neutral about religion, because I consider the truth to be less simple than we predict it is; I feel it must be incomprehensible, but that's my view on it.

All in all, it was solidly written and you surprised me by controlling your inner urge to go on a vocabulary spree or interrupt the stream of your approach. I've seen your work take tumbles when you start going with multiple rhyme schemes and lose track (and lose the reader) by initiating a rapid tangent. Last interpretation: God is indivisible? I don't know. Thanks for the read, good work.

Keep doing your thing.


why do bad things happen to good people?

what are accidents?

there is greater math than our math. far greater. that is why an anomoly in these dimensions put it into the realm of greater math which uses anomolies disguised as "accidents" to eliminate the anomolies.

thought this was obv. also, your response to the just kidding line proved the first two.

thx for reading.
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