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Fluid system physics, mathematical entropy and enthalpy Visits from critics of the vessel nonsensical’s telepathy? Just kidding, the crux is that anything is possible Just as pain is subjective we invent our every obstacle. Now then, we exist in a system where anything that can happen…can This is why there always needs to be a contingency when you….plan To be an anomaly is to be in possession of something outside of the system Such as an artifact out of time, or even a man free in mind while in prison Envision the discussion and linear functions of quantum causality…. Psych. You can’t because they swerve and appear in this dimension retroactively. Take the time traveler, there can be only so many at one “time” and “place” Take your own mind and blow it when u think of the size of space The continuum follows the Word. The overall plan of the script, Still in yet as with any fabric, the right force and direction can cause a rip. So what does the system do? Does it Donnie darko? Or even this out of place artifact disguised as bizarre flow? Sighs, lights Newport, puts hands on hips They are all asleep aboard their sunken battle ships. Still in yet, allow the message to resonate…. Anomalies must be controlled, extolled to exacerbate There is a remnant from old who can code at a faster rate, But even they cannot display the way to crash the gate For the system has an ingenious method of constraining anomalies There is an allotted balance allowed, a literal space for remainders Numbers that are so big they are small, numbers so small they are huge To liken this concept to your brain brings forth the force of deluge. Dispel fools and propel clues for the clever to search out Hide them under the ocean and make their motors burn out Because every anomaly is dangerous but the system allows a set number Their unique code out codes the code but unknown is the main tumbler Which sets anomalies on anomalies to destroy anomalies with anomalies That is why serendipity and synhronicity are visible when sought with ease The problem is that when one destroys the other, the one will still remain And another is needed to be brought forth to quell the one’s strain. So the coefficient in it’s simplest is a never ending system of balance Remainders divided and coincided with grace provided from God’s palace In closing if you time travel, be prepared to die by an accident Take solace in knowing that the accident was on purpose in light of all the facts I sent. Correlation does not equal causation. This is knowledge used to the benefit And I am sorry if this leaves your brain poached like eggs benedict. Anomalies are sent to destroy previous anomalies, the constrainer coefficient This helps explain omniscient’s holy mission. Word.
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Such as an artifact out of time, or even a man free in mind while in prison-
deep^^ The continuum follows the Word. The overall plan of the script, Still in yet as with any fabric, the right force and direction can cause a rip. -uh huh In closing if you time travel, be prepared to die by an accident Take solace in knowing that the accident was on purpose in light of all the facts I sent. -Ok Ok I liked the 1st section the best.....lotta deepness and theories being explored...2nd was a lil' over the top for my personal style....But you def, puttin' ya self out there coming up wit' some shit to make people think... Polished concept...Really felt your were teaching with thiz piece.... Good drop bro HoLLa |
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thanks for the feed brethren!
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To be an anomaly is to be in possession of something outside of the system
Such as an artifact out of time, or even a man free in mind while in prison Envision the discussion and linear functions of quantum causality…. Psych. You can’t because they swerve and appear in this dimension retroactively. Take the time traveler, there can be only so many at one “time” and “place” Take your own mind and blow it when u think of the size of space i like this because it basically sums up my outlook on life. couple of bars afterwards felt like filler with the donnie darko/dark flow but picked back up Numbers that are so big they are small, numbers so small they are huge To liken this concept to your brain brings forth the force of deluge. Dispel fools and propel clues for the clever to search out Hide them under the ocean and make their motors burn out a couple of bars afterwards again i felt like you were reaching to stretch the rhyme scheme, you have sick ideas and obviously they flow freely but dont throw them together so forcefully |
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fair enough, thanks for taking the time to feed bruv.
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no worries. i dont have to tell you you know what you're doing, with about 30 minutes more time on the same amount of bars this could have been way better though
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also fair. Thank you sir.
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no worries. take it on board next time you write. i'm taking my own advice to you on board right now for myself
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I can't help but say, this whole thing made me think of the movie jumper
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Fair enough. Thank you for taking time out to read it. In a way it could be likened unto that...how he ends up killing himself. yeah.
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This is what makes you, you, and I'm no psychologist but I've learned a couple of things about you through your writing. If I'm wrong, it's because... well, I'm wrong, so bear with me. You're a person who prides himself on his accomplishments and the books he's read. You believe in your religion so much that you've sought out science to mend the loose strands left by a sole doctrine - now you have some microcosmic ammo to back up your position/stance too. Mix these elements together and you have a piece that starts off with heavy vocabulary words in the first line, enough to make me wince, tbh. You recovered though and settled into the rest of the verse naturally. I have no qualms beyond, maybe the first three lines. I didn't like how you said "Just kidding" - I didn't know you were kidding to begin with, unless I'm missing a point of humor. The second line was honestly like a bad Star Wars movie and didn't fit with the rest of the content.
What I took away from the central theme was anomalies, similar to Neo's identity in The Matrix, being an exception to the rule of consciousness, being a glitch but not really a glitch, being a symptom of a system that's overdue for reboot or alteration. Mathematics, the scale of the universe, and even multiple dimensions. Anomalies being sent to destroy other anomalies I don't really get. Are you referring to metaphysical hiccups, messianic figures, contradictions or moments of deja vu, as those embattled anomalies? I didn't get that part. God being a mathematician in the cosmos, working in mysterious ways, but bound by the language of numbers? This is why I'm neutral about religion, because I consider the truth to be less simple than we predict it is; I feel it must be incomprehensible, but that's my view on it. All in all, it was solidly written and you surprised me by controlling your inner urge to go on a vocabulary spree or interrupt the stream of your approach. I've seen your work take tumbles when you start going with multiple rhyme schemes and lose track (and lose the reader) by initiating a rapid tangent. Last interpretation: God is indivisible? I don't know. Thanks for the read, good work. Keep doing your thing. Last edited by Vulgar; 09-04-2014 at 09:18 PM. |
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why do bad things happen to good people? what are accidents? there is greater math than our math. far greater. that is why an anomoly in these dimensions put it into the realm of greater math which uses anomolies disguised as "accidents" to eliminate the anomolies. thought this was obv. also, your response to the just kidding line proved the first two. thx for reading.
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i farted, jesus asscheeks, maybe if we read it backwards, what?, why? |
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