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Vinzr:
"Everything else has never mattered as its now apart of history" I'm not sure if you intentionally typed "apart" instead of "a apart" but if you did... i thought it was clever.. You really could have done without the all caps though.. It wasn't necessary, and also made it read the word like I was yelling it.. lol When I read the topic, I was thinking ecstasy as in the feeling, but you used it here as the actual drug. It was nice to read something and be surprised.. Que: Turning Misery and Ecstasy into kings.. interesting way to interpret the topic there. The whole verse was an enjoyable read.. Focusing on the rallying of troops and pre-battle speech was pretty fresh.. The rhyming was everywhere. Some lines in particular were great, but the other lines didn't rely on them to carry the verse, and as a whole they worked well together. If Vinzr's verse was more tightened up, I think I would have given it to him.. buttt Vote- Que
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