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Old 08-31-2014, 05:31 PM   #8
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Innovator - Trying to make sense of our emotions and handle everything that's going on in this world isn't an easy task, sure as hell make some people crazy and feel imprisoned to living life as they're ''lost in the world'' with seemingly only one option to free themselves. Cool verse with some insight on the darker parts of humanity.

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- You're starting off your verse flawlessly and drags the reader into it at once. Some dope stand alone lines too, ''Supply and demand; what's the market for me?'' made me think about what I'm trying to achieve with what I do as well. Dope closure to it as well.

Vote - El Pancake from a neutral standpoint. Pancake got the superior verse as far as rhyming goes and the verse as a whole. But personally I felt the shit in Innovators verse better, I really enjoyed his verse this time around. Kinda didn't want to pick a winner of the two, but morally I felt it would be wrong to vote for Innovator based off the fact that I just liked what he was saying more when Pancake got the better verse in all other aspects as far as writing goes. So ye, Pancake gets my vote. Really enjoyed reading this battle.
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