AOWL Week 7: Vinzr (3-1) vs. Que (0-0)-- [QUE WINS 9-2]

Cereal_Killa · 04-01-2013, 10:31 PM

Vin:
I like, ecstasy itself is the middle ground of happiness.. Cool, this was straight forward, easy to capture and filled with a fierce amount of emotions.. Which was needed for the topic.. You captured the characters internal struggle softly but with some good reasons for their current addiction.. I enjoyed this piece, with the development of your character as a pill junkie not looking for help but feeling he has found it.. Nice drop

Que:
I’m loven this an all visual emotion.. A live action battle field, with weapons and slaughter to captured the battle for happiness inside ourselves.. This was a cool piece, rhyming structures cool and vocab hot.. All in all your imagery is what made this verse POP in my mind.. Highly enjoyed this..

Vote = Vinzr

The writing styles of both are sooo different in this..

Que had the more advanced structure hands down but Vin’s concept though seemingly very simple was a lot cooler to me..

Vin to stay between misery n ecstasy has to swallow ecstasy while is in misery
Where que had made a visual war ground of emotions..

To me the brutal reality of vin’s paradox , is a tighter idea to come up with and make work..

Though saying that yall brought some fire in this match woohaa.. GL blokes

04-01-2013, 10:31 PM	#11
Cereal_Killa Licking Lily's.. Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 706 Battle Record: 11-6 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 3565733	Vin: I like, ecstasy itself is the middle ground of happiness.. Cool, this was straight forward, easy to capture and filled with a fierce amount of emotions.. Which was needed for the topic.. You captured the characters internal struggle softly but with some good reasons for their current addiction.. I enjoyed this piece, with the development of your character as a pill junkie not looking for help but feeling he has found it.. Nice drop Que: I’m loven this an all visual emotion.. A live action battle field, with weapons and slaughter to captured the battle for happiness inside ourselves.. This was a cool piece, rhyming structures cool and vocab hot.. All in all your imagery is what made this verse POP in my mind.. Highly enjoyed this.. Vote = Vinzr The writing styles of both are sooo different in this.. Que had the more advanced structure hands down but Vin’s concept though seemingly very simple was a lot cooler to me.. Vin to stay between misery n ecstasy has to swallow ecstasy while is in misery Where que had made a visual war ground of emotions.. To me the brutal reality of vin’s paradox , is a tighter idea to come up with and make work.. Though saying that yall brought some fire in this match woohaa.. GL blokes __________________ You think YOU'RE sick I shit cough drops ..