Power of Persuasion

Pharaohs Army · 08-29-2014, 11:38 PM

does this really belong in the open mic section gamble?
Lol jk kinda

it's hard to not be impressed by campbell's lines there lol. wow.

certain's & jason todd's in particular flow very nicely.
they actually all flow well except 1.

gamble i know you're better than this i've seen it. impressive # of rhymes but IMO often have to change cadence a bit in order to fit them.

but i am one to talk, i usually have the same exact problem an order of magnitude worser.

Plot's 1st half of the verse was dope but got a bit weaker at the end. i think it was an 'effort' issue and not anything that feedback could help.

08-29-2014, 11:38 PM	#11
Pharaohs Army Banned Join Date: Aug 2014 Posts: 2,956 Battle Record: 6 - 14 Rep Power: 0	does this really belong in the open mic section gamble? Lol jk kinda it's hard to not be impressed by campbell's lines there lol. wow. certain's & jason todd's in particular flow very nicely. they actually all flow well except 1. gamble i know you're better than this i've seen it. impressive # of rhymes but IMO often have to change cadence a bit in order to fit them. but i am one to talk, i usually have the same exact problem an order of magnitude worser. Plot's 1st half of the verse was dope but got a bit weaker at the end. i think it was an 'effort' issue and not anything that feedback could help.