Round 1: 8. trap vs. 9. Adonis \\ trap wins 5-0

MMLP · 08-25-2014, 01:16 PM

I liked both spins of the topic, really subtle. Made the piece's a good read

Trap kept a better consistency of writing imo, without trying to do too much. Direct and clear in his approach. Loved how the topic unraveled at the end,

Adonis, i think your angle would of been better suited for a longer verse, it would given you a better platform to explain what you were telling. Seemed to have to squeeze abit too much in and it did make it harder to read and follow. vocabulary range was impressive, lost the structure the rhyming patterns at times

my vote is edged to Trap

08-25-2014, 01:16 PM	#5
MMLP Senior Member Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 614 Battle Record: 15-16 Champed - Write Week 9 Rep Power: 9768091	I liked both spins of the topic, really subtle. Made the piece's a good read Trap kept a better consistency of writing imo, without trying to do too much. Direct and clear in his approach. Loved how the topic unraveled at the end, Adonis, i think your angle would of been better suited for a longer verse, it would given you a better platform to explain what you were telling. Seemed to have to squeeze abit too much in and it did make it harder to read and follow. vocabulary range was impressive, lost the structure the rhyming patterns at times my vote is edged to Trap Last edited by MMLP; 08-25-2014 at 01:22 PM. Reason: direct and clear