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08-24-2014, 10:45 PM
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Mic Check
Join Date: Mar 2013
Location: Calgary Alberta Canada
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eh not bad. mal i never really read you before, your storytelling is decent. you can paint a picture pretty well, very content driven which is good but the actual rhyming is your weak point. shit was just suuuuuppper basic and your vocab was boring too. copping out by saying fuck and shit more than a few times is pretty weak, just looks like you have nothing better to say. theres SOOOO many good RHYMERS on this site. if u just read and feed u will find TONS of inspiration for stepping up your technicality and flow game. cause right now its just too basic. the meat of ur verse was good though, as in what u were trying to say. keep that element in your style but add some more skill lyrically and you'll be on your way.
Certain: shutup. jk. what advice can i give the current champ? if the rumors are true... Way more structurally sound, way more advanced rhyming, way better vocab, mal can learn alot from you. this was a tight concise verse. very good. post more
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08-25-2014, 06:46 PM
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Join Date: Jan 2013
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just how i felt so i put it down and i get what u mean my rhymes are not complex but im not lookin for a big vocab to make write good songs. im def not tryna be some aesop rock usin big ass words cause that shit is boring to me. sometimes simples is better than complex and maybe that wasnt the case here but still to each is own. thanks for the critique
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