Champagne (Malachi & Certain)

CopyPat · 08-24-2014, 10:45 PM

eh not bad. mal i never really read you before, your storytelling is decent. you can paint a picture pretty well, very content driven which is good but the actual rhyming is your weak point. shit was just suuuuuppper basic and your vocab was boring too. copping out by saying fuck and shit more than a few times is pretty weak, just looks like you have nothing better to say. theres SOOOO many good RHYMERS on this site. if u just read and feed u will find TONS of inspiration for stepping up your technicality and flow game. cause right now its just too basic. the meat of ur verse was good though, as in what u were trying to say. keep that element in your style but add some more skill lyrically and you'll be on your way.

Certain: shutup.

jk. what advice can i give the current champ? if the rumors are true...
Way more structurally sound, way more advanced rhyming, way better vocab, mal can learn alot from you. this was a tight concise verse. very good. post more

08-24-2014, 10:45 PM	#5
CopyPat Mic Check Join Date: Mar 2013 Location: Calgary Alberta Canada Posts: 708 Battle Record: 13-10 Rep Power: 3742225	eh not bad. mal i never really read you before, your storytelling is decent. you can paint a picture pretty well, very content driven which is good but the actual rhyming is your weak point. shit was just suuuuuppper basic and your vocab was boring too. copping out by saying fuck and shit more than a few times is pretty weak, just looks like you have nothing better to say. theres SOOOO many good RHYMERS on this site. if u just read and feed u will find TONS of inspiration for stepping up your technicality and flow game. cause right now its just too basic. the meat of ur verse was good though, as in what u were trying to say. keep that element in your style but add some more skill lyrically and you'll be on your way. Certain: shutup. jk. what advice can i give the current champ? if the rumors are true... Way more structurally sound, way more advanced rhyming, way better vocab, mal can learn alot from you. this was a tight concise verse. very good. post more __________________ My syllable count approximately a billion, bounce. You cannot compete.