AOWL Week 7: Kuja (2-3) vs. ZenLand (3-3) [ZENLAND WINS BY FORFEIT.]

Nigma · 03-31-2013, 01:34 PM

Loved the rhyme scheme Zen. The way you bounced back in forth between multies reminds me of how I've been trying to write lately. 90% of the verse was awesome in my opinion, the only shortcomings were a line or two that were focused more on the rhyme scheme then the content, sections that required more description then they were given or something. Too hung over for specific quotes, but it wasn't nothing major at all. Very nice drop.

Kuja, you came with a verse predominantly more focused on content over rhyme scheme which contrasted well with your opponents verse here from a readers standpoint. You had an enigmatic verse, something I am quite fond of. Not only was my curiousity peeked throughout the read, but I'm still pondering the perspective you took. J.t.R = JT Ready? In any case, I'm fairly sure you wrote this based off a real person which gives the emotions felt another level of depth.

I really really liked Zen here, however Kujas verse really stuck with me this week. Great battle!

03-31-2013, 01:34 PM	#7
Nigma The COAT... Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: BC, Canada Posts: 1,723 Battle Record: 28-20 Champed - Art of Writing League (x3) Rep Power: 4595813	Loved the rhyme scheme Zen. The way you bounced back in forth between multies reminds me of how I've been trying to write lately. 90% of the verse was awesome in my opinion, the only shortcomings were a line or two that were focused more on the rhyme scheme then the content, sections that required more description then they were given or something. Too hung over for specific quotes, but it wasn't nothing major at all. Very nice drop. Kuja, you came with a verse predominantly more focused on content over rhyme scheme which contrasted well with your opponents verse here from a readers standpoint. You had an enigmatic verse, something I am quite fond of. Not only was my curiousity peeked throughout the read, but I'm still pondering the perspective you took. J.t.R = JT Ready? In any case, I'm fairly sure you wrote this based off a real person which gives the emotions felt another level of depth. I really really liked Zen here, however Kujas verse really stuck with me this week. Great battle!