Quarter Final: Richard Schwartz vs. Template [RICHARD SCHWARTZ WINS 6-2]

UnbornBuddha · 08-17-2014, 07:46 PM

Both had well written verses. Albeit Richard's language was more bland, lacking enticement. But it was very well executed with technical precision. Though the way Richard depicted his topic was a bit more mundane, especially with something so otherworldly. Ironically, though very meticulous in some regard it felt inadvertent. To give an image: The movie schematic was like a sour taste to someone with more of a sweet tooth.

Template approached it in a more predictable manner, however it still felt more succinct, and attractive as a whole; tackling the theme more directly sometimes come at the peril of predictability. But at the end of the day the reader wants to be in the same mindset the writer was in when writing. As if they looked at the topic and immediately the story of the writer came to mind. This resonance is almost a shamanistic approach, and I felt Template succeeded in putting me more in this state. Plus, I felt his writing was more on point with prophetic diction.

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Thank you.

08-17-2014, 07:46 PM	#4
UnbornBuddha Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2014 Posts: 1,008 Battle Record: 23-10 Champed - Art of Writing League - AOWL Season 5 Rep Power: 23856379	Both had well written verses. Albeit Richard's language was more bland, lacking enticement. But it was very well executed with technical precision. Though the way Richard depicted his topic was a bit more mundane, especially with something so otherworldly. Ironically, though very meticulous in some regard it felt inadvertent. To give an image: The movie schematic was like a sour taste to someone with more of a sweet tooth. Template approached it in a more predictable manner, however it still felt more succinct, and attractive as a whole; tackling the theme more directly sometimes come at the peril of predictability. But at the end of the day the reader wants to be in the same mindset the writer was in when writing. As if they looked at the topic and immediately the story of the writer came to mind. This resonance is almost a shamanistic approach, and I felt Template succeeded in putting me more in this state. Plus, I felt his writing was more on point with prophetic diction. Vote Template Thank you.