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murda sho [VS] BROKE LESNAR [BROKE LESNAR WINS]
The Summer Classic VII Netcees Premier Text Battling Tournament @BROKE LESNAR @murda sho Rules Due Dates:
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08-11-2014, 12:57 AM | #2 |
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Haha dude...
That last verse was misses and weird trys, with no drama for the facts Those punches committed worst air strikes than Obama on Iraq So let's play, u could just get a scar or ur chest caved But I mean u no harm Les, that's just what u are on ur best day If u were good in the past then my advice is to stop or recycle now Cause if u want a shot it'd rival what those cops did to Michael Brown It'd make a mess when I pop and clap a couple rounds... Bullets'd hit BL tee and it'd look like u dropped a sandwich on the ground When I see ur chick she yells "HEY SHO!" and commits to giving head When u see ur chick she says "hey" low, and continues wishing u were dead We were rooting for u Broke! Then u started getting too loose with riddles Now if we fed off ur energy we'd probably be eating fruit loops and skittles I knew u'd be next to get beat, so once I shoot ur chest with this heat The doctors'll have to hold u together more than ur two bf's when u sleep My archers on deck, but I told em to wait til u rap or attempt rhymes Then do u like my last round, u won't see the aeros till after ur dead lines Zip Him Up!
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ya I've been NS'ed twice n' with TicTac I could have easily wavered but now it's the 4th rd n' murda's the result of that bullet leaving the chamber u champed Bad Blood II..3 yrs ago, that's 1,095 days u wasted text n' 2011 was the last time I remember seeing anything from Jayson Fresh those 1 letter np's on Apex were trash, so up ur game or sit it down u tried to ruin Aer sho....I'll do that n' crash this fucking Plane into the ground I'm doubting the guy, google Tana Rocks he's got an album to try u said No Filter's taking Ohio by storm, but its 82° without a cloud in the sky fuck ur bogus goon image u frat boy, u aren't a threat dawg n' listen u only roll with hard ass street niggas that'll stomp..the yard in a step competition but u a paid g right? I'll snatch ur revolver n' dual wield to loot sho dinero I'm strapped for cash so if guy ritchie get the lock stock n' two smoking barrels when it comes to NC HOF discussions u should never get involved ur like Sbarro, bitch.. ..at the bottom of the food chain n' nowhere near the center of em' all inb4 I post ur pic, ☆ tats on dudes r gay..u would admit that right? just ONE makes u a faggot..so 5 on ur forearm's a review for how u live that life |
08-11-2014, 04:54 PM | #4 |
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First and foremost, Congrats to both to making it to the final 4. I was gonna say more but I'm not trying to be toooo gay. Sho That last verse was misses and weird trys, with no drama for the facts Those punches committed worst air strikes than Obama on Iraq --This is ok, nothing to heavy here. Wording is fine, just doesn't seem to hard hitting-- So let's play, u could just get a scar or ur chest caved But I mean u no harm Les, that's just what u are on ur best day --Eh. I don't mean to be the english teacher here. But the Les in Broke's name is a "z" sound, where as in harmless it's a hard "s". Either way this wasn't the greatest-- If u were good in the past then my advice is to stop or recycle now Cause if u want a shot it'd rival what those cops did to Michael Brown --lol yo. Im like 15 minutes from all of these fucking riots and shit. Shits insane. Anyway, cool hitter here-- It'd make a mess when I pop and clap a couple rounds... Bullets'd hit BL tee and it'd look like u dropped a sandwich on the ground --When I saw the BLT play I thought this was gonna be a lot better. I feel like you could have executed this in a more direct way to make it hit harder-- When I see ur chick she yells "HEY SHO!" and commits to giving head When u see ur chick she says "hey" low, and continues wishing u were dead --filler-- We were rooting for u Broke! Then u started getting too loose with riddles Now if we fed off ur energy we'd probably be eating fruit loops and skittles --haha-- I knew u'd be next to get beat, so once I shoot ur chest with this heat The doctors'll have to hold u together more than ur two bf's when u sleep --Ok. Not the best/worst-- My archers on deck, but I told em to wait til u rap or attempt rhymes Then do u like my last round, u won't see the aeros till after ur dead lines --dope-- Broke ya I've been NS'ed twice n' with TicTac I could have easily wavered but now it's the 4th rd n' murda's the result of that bullet leaving the chamber --Cool play on an obviously used Murda/Murder kill Murda concept lol.-- u champed Bad Blood II..3 yrs ago, that's 1,095 days u wasted text n' 2011 was the last time I remember seeing anything from Jayson Fresh --Nice-- those 1 letter np's on Apex were trash, so up ur game or sit it down u tried to ruin Aer sho....I'll do that n' crash this fucking Plane into the ground --Seen air show too many times for this one. The personal spin on it makes it passable but still not that great-- I'm doubting the guy, google Tana Rocks he's got an album to try u said No Filter's taking Ohio by storm, but its 82° without a cloud in the sky --cool-- fuck ur bogus goon image u frat boy, u aren't a threat dawg n' listen u only roll with hard ass street niggas that'll stomp..the yard in a step competition --lol. Ok. Made me chuckle but not that great-- but u a paid g right? I'll snatch ur revolver n' dual wield to loot sho dinero I'm strapped for cash so if guy ritchie get the lock stock n' two smoking barrels --Thought this was dope-- when it comes to NC HOF discussions u should never get involved ur like Sbarro, bitch.. ..at the bottom of the food chain n' nowhere near the center of em' all --eh. Didn't love the concept or the execution to be perfectly honest, man-- inb4 I post ur pic, ☆ tats on dudes r gay..u would admit that right? just ONE makes u a faggot..so 5 on ur forearm's a review for how u live that life --Simple and direct. You're a fucking detective dude I swear.-- Cool battle. Verse from Sho definitely wasn't as good as his verse against Alvin I don't think. He had some stuff in here that I just wasn't feeling too much, others could though. That Hey line I thought was probably the worst line from either verse. That just felt super filler and lazy to me. Broke had some cool lines. I thought Jason Fresh was probably line of the battle. His misses weren't as bad wither in my opinion. Dope stuff dudes. Battle could go either way, good luck. V/ Broke Lesnar
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Cool battle I liked Murdas BL tee line, liked when he said in first line "your verse was misses and weird tries no drama for the" cus it was true. Other than those I felt like verse was full of just ok stuff. Seemed rushed. Broke the jayaon fresh line was ok albeit generic, you had some other bars that could've been worded differently like the Sbarro and Stomp the Yard Sho needed better concepts and Broke needed better wording. I enjoyed Murda's verse more that's who gets my vote.
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I thought Murdas wording was better, lol. And made note of the tiny wordage and set-ups that amplified not only the 'punchline' bar, but also the precedent. It was unique and fresh. Murda had a bunch of jabs here and throughout and was an enjoyable verse. My only nitpicking is that, before every punchline bar he writes about guns or something. Which is cool, I guess, but it gets redundant. I make note of another battler in this tournament who had repetitive sex bars and almost lost the battle even when his verse was clearly better. Nothing is said here. I guess pretend guns and killing people is cooler than having pretend sex with woman? figures. Fags. Anyway, liked both verses. Broke had a lot of jabs too, and an enjoyable read too. Wording wise both lacked if you're looking for that end sting, but it's tough, and if you look primarily into that, it'll suck. I liked all the lines aero quoted saying he didn't like. If I have to think about it for like 9 seconds then it's not good in my book. Close battle but I'm going with broke. Vote - Broke Lesnar |
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08-12-2014, 05:11 PM | #7 |
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Murda Haha dude... That last verse was misses and weird trys, with no drama for the facts Those punches committed worst air strikes than Obama on Iraq Okay So let's play, u could just get a scar or ur chest caved But I mean u no harm Les, that's just what u are on ur best day Dope If u were good in the past then my advice is to stop or recycle now Cause if u want a shot it'd rival what those cops did to Michael Brown Decent It'd make a mess when I pop and clap a couple rounds... Bullets'd hit BL tee and it'd look like u dropped a sandwich on the ground Lol sick When I see ur chick she yells "HEY SHO!" and commits to giving head When u see ur chick she says "hey" low, and continues wishing u were dead Eh had potential. Corny. We were rooting for u Broke! Then u started getting too loose with riddles Now if we fed off ur energy we'd probably be eating fruit loops and skittles Lol I knew u'd be next to get beat, so once I shoot ur chest with this heat The doctors'll have to hold u together more than ur two bf's when u sleep Nice My archers on deck, but I told em to wait til u rap or attempt rhymes Then do u like my last round, u won't see the aeros till after ur dead lines Good closer Zip Him Up! Nice verse from Murda pretty consistent, nothing too crazy but solid. Broke ya I've been NS'ed twice n' with TicTac I could have easily wavered but now it's the 4th rd n' murda's the result of that bullet leaving the chamber Solid opener u champed Bad Blood II..3 yrs ago, that's 1,095 days u wasted text n' 2011 was the last time I remember seeing anything from Jayson Fresh Lol ok those 1 letter np's on Apex were trash, so up ur game or sit it down u tried to ruin Aer sho....I'll do that n' crash this fucking Plane into the ground Meh okay seemed alil forced I'm doubting the guy, google Tana Rocks he's got an album to try u said No Filter's taking Ohio by storm, but its 82° without a cloud in the sky Haha dope fuck ur bogus goon image u frat boy, u aren't a threat dawg n' listen u only roll with hard ass street niggas that'll stomp..the yard in a step competition Dopppe but u a paid g right? I'll snatch ur revolver n' dual wield to loot sho dinero I'm strapped for cash so if guy ritchie get the lock stock n' two smoking barrels Kotb when it comes to NC HOF discussions u should never get involved ur like Sbarro, bitch.. ..at the bottom of the food chain n' nowhere near the center of em' all Lol inb4 I post ur pic, ☆ tats on dudes r gay..u would admit that right? just ONE makes u a faggot..so 5 on ur forearm's a review for how u live that life Ok Overall nice battle. Solid read. Broke just beasted tho Vote - broke lesnar
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murda sho: This was a solid but unremarkable verse. Your wording was there, and you had a few timely lines. The opener, as has been the case in most of your verses this tournament, was your best line. I liked BL tee as a concept but not in execution, but most of your verse was the opposite. The "When I see"/"When u see" thing felt very much like something Fracture would have used in 2004, for better or worse. I didn't think you got grimy enough, especially knowing what he would do.
BROKE LESNAR: The detective stuff didn't pay off as much here, mostly because you didn't have as much and smartly steered away from overuse. The Jayson Fresh line was clever, and the closer was awesome. As far as the more generic stuff, you worded the Guy Ritchie and Aer sho lines well, but I can't help but feel like they must be done to death by this point. No Filter could have been used better, too. You had more interesting concepts and personals than murda sho, but this battle was weak compared to both of your previous outputs. Vote: BROKE LESNAR
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man, both didnt bring it
sho was really wack tho broke wack too almost as wack as his research on each opponent but he won
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08-15-2014, 11:01 AM | #11 |
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Those punches committed worst air strikes than Obama on Iraq -decent But I mean u no harm Les, that's just what u are on ur best day -cool It'd make a mess when I pop and clap a couple rounds... Bullets'd hit BL tee and it'd look like u dropped a sandwich on the ground -that was dope I knew u'd be next to get beat, so once I shoot ur chest with this heat The doctors'll have to hold u together more than ur two bf's when u sleep -liked the wording an set up...this was funny solid verse.... Broke those 1 letter np's on Apex were trash, so up ur game or sit it down u tried to ruin Aer sho....I'll do that n' crash this fucking Plane into the ground -Whoa I'm doubting the guy, google Tana Rocks he's got an album to try u said No Filter's taking Ohio by storm, but its 82° without a cloud in the sky -dope fuck ur bogus goon image u frat boy, u aren't a threat dawg n' listen u only roll with hard ass street niggas that'll stomp..the yard in a step competition -haha Broke had more personals....other then that both were pretty even as far as some filler an consistent punches...Felt Murda was a smoother flow... flow-murda- personals Broke....rest about even so I'ma go wit' who had the hardest hitter in my eyez Broke that Air show plane bar was pretty Heavy...I'm rollin' wit' u cuz' of that Vote- Broke |
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So let's play, u could just get a scar or ur chest caved
But I mean u no harm Les, that's just what u are on ur best day If u were good in the past then my advice is to stop or recycle now Cause if u want a shot it'd rival what those cops did to Michael Brown When I see ur chick she yells "HEY SHO!" and commits to giving head When u see ur chick she says "hey" low, and continues wishing u were dead Vs u champed Bad Blood II..3 yrs ago, that's 1,095 days u wasted text n' 2011 was the last time I remember seeing anything from Jayson Fresh those 1 letter np's on Apex were trash, so up ur game or sit it down u tried to ruin Aer sho....I'll do that n' crash this fucking Plane into the ground I'm doubting the guy, google Tana Rocks he's got an album to try u said No Filter's taking Ohio by storm, but its 82° without a cloud in the sky fuck ur bogus goon image u frat boy, u aren't a threat dawg n' listen u only roll with hard ass street niggas that'll stomp..the yard in a step competition V/broke, this was a cool battle, i thought sho's no harm les was dope, but he wasnt as consistent as he usually is tbh here...broke had a good verse the stomped yard was lol an i thought jayson fresh was nice, he pulled this one w/ one more quoted, nice battle props yah'll.
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