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Old 08-17-2014, 12:41 PM   #7
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This was really good, obviously. In keeping with your known standard of writing. This was probably in the upper half? They're all kind of the same, which isn't meant to be an insult. The high level and sheer number of drops just kind of melds into one when I try to pinpoint specific high points. They all basically fall into braggadacio. Swag and flow with an intellectual/condescending bent. Like you're looking down on the reader and saying "try to top this, you can't look at the words and ideas idiyote." Wrote this 2 minutes 3 seconds including a coffee break. The 'flow' of your pieces are the strongest asset, that or the wording. Staccato text. Misdirections and runs of thought that most should be jealous of. Like mentioning 'lye' and then having the patience to go through 6-7 more ideas before referencing 'Fight Club'. The rhyming was strong, as well. You can take a starting point, a new line, and tendril out unlike most here in a unique way. You do that multiple times in a piece, often tying them together. That's why your drops are always a joy to read, this one in particular. Good job.
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