08-14-2014, 07:30 AM | #2 |
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08-14-2014, 10:57 AM | #3 |
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...yup.
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08-15-2014, 08:33 PM | #4 |
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Ima smash your head through the coffee table, somebody grab me a body bag
Cuz ringing camp's bell is light work; you ole hunchback of the couch looking fag
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08-15-2014, 11:28 PM | #5 |
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the 3 letter man lame, wack and wont blaze a can
i'll cap at all his fake attacks with a weapon from the angry fan
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08-16-2014, 01:36 PM | #6 |
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ok ..not really feeling either entry this time
ive seen both competitors with better shit ydks had potential for humor..I like that u tied in the ringing bell with the hunchback of notre dame shit..cuz thats relevant..my only gripe is the flow /transition from setup to punch..syllables didnt match..results are a choppy line. camp bell..urs was executed cleaner but unfortunately im totally unfamiliar with the reference..I googled angry fan but as I expected..it was entirely too vague..hopefully ppl will come in here n see ur line for what it really is. apologies that being said I have to give ydk the edge in this ydk
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08-18-2014, 11:49 AM | #7 |
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lmao i still dont think ive got what @Camp Bell was tryna do with his punch, complete miss to me on his part
@YDK actually had a decent nameplay and some humour to it he got this
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08-19-2014, 12:30 AM | #8 |
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YDK this was cool. I think you're getting the hang of this(again?) It all didn't completely jibe, but it was still good.
Camp I don't know. Something tells me you dug too deep for a punch and completely lost the audience. In the hood we call that reaching lol. Kinda like what I do every round lol. MVGT YDK for a better understood punch.
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08-19-2014, 09:05 AM | #9 |
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Ydk had a harder punch IMO
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08-19-2014, 10:46 AM | #10 |
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YDK had a cool line couldve been worded a bit more crisp & I think I see what Camp tried to do with the Capital/Cap at all .. Angry fans type in caps? It just wasn't executed or delivered properly if im correct if not then im completely lost..
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08-19-2014, 11:36 PM | #11 |
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YDK: I liked this for a roast. The wording should be tighter for a battle.
Camp Bell: I have no idea what your reference was to. Don't make voters use Google. Vote: YDK
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08-20-2014, 12:06 PM | #12 |
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I'm assuming camp's is a Capitol wordplay...
that said, didn't really like either bar ydk's had potential though v/ydk |
08-20-2014, 07:53 PM | #13 |
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08-20-2014, 11:00 PM | #14 |
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I spent alkt of time on thsi battle bc I dod t wanr tp shortc zhtenge anybod but I have to go wjth ydk bc h3 awesome and jt camp kind of swqyed in discussion...but after the sauwy I thoight hia bar was dopw
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