Sometimes I like to write about my feels...

Witty · 08-14-2014, 06:53 PM

....but this isn't one of those times, this is one of those rhymes that'll make you kick a pregnant bitch in the stomach til the ugly hoe dies and you can see the fetus juice leaking under those thighs, this that thunderdome style, we're dueling with this rhymin' shit, I'm mad max, you're a student of this violent wit. The evilest bastid with the demons to match it, shit, I'm bleeding, a masochist who believes in peace with an asterisk, what I mean is I feel like a pacifist but there's anger in me that will never leave, and it's cancerous, but I'm a cross between Thor, Charles Manson, and Jesus of Nazareth, except if it was me I wouldn't have helped that piece of shit Lazarus "You're dead and STILL want my help? Nah, deal with it, faggot bitch"...and I'm sorry if this seems a bit blasphemous, but I don't believe in that magic shit, I don't adhere to antiquated schemes like a classicist. It's strange, because only in my dreams am I passionate, in real life I'm cold, calculating, seen as an analyst....I'm lonely, fuck, my only crutch is this weed so I leannnn on the cannabis. If you look into my soul you'll see a philanthropist but if you keep digging deeper you'll find the disease that I battle with, nationalist greed for me was the catalyst to say 'fuck the world', because I hate the killers but I don't believe in the activists. I'm still young, the book of my life just opened, so why do I feel like I'm on the last scene of the manuscript? Nah, I'm kidding, well not really...I dunno, damn....fuck. Go lick an old man's nuts and the two of you hold hands, slut. Just random lines to pass the time, I've mastered rhymes and now I'm bored so I'll rape a drunk bitch and smash her spine, choke her to death with a rubber dick while I fuck her in the ass with mine, the craziest, laziest, haziest, mind...dunno if I'm coming or going, but if I'm cummin'....saying I didn't know she was underage won't save me this time.

Zen · 08-14-2014, 07:24 PM

I tried to quote it on my phone but my phone's stupid, but the manuscript line was the best of this. That gave me them feels, brah. The rhyming was the star out of all if this though, specifically the first half. Great flow to that section even though I felt it started to fall off after the manuscript line. This was still very good though, but I do enjoy the feels especially the last one you wrote. Good to see you dropping, Witty.

CopyPat · 08-15-2014, 12:33 AM

hahah i liked this. the jesus of nazareth shit was sick. i actually didnt like when i switched it up at the end. the old mans nuts scheme was deec too but then u switched that one right away into another that clearly wasn't as good as the first few. overall solid though. was entertaining to read and flow was nice. good shit witty. you should post more and cypher with us on aim wtf. get aim, u have aim?

PancakeBrah · 08-15-2014, 12:51 AM

"I hate the killers but I don't believe in the activists."

awesome

Kin · 08-15-2014, 06:58 AM

but I'm a cross between Thor, Charles Manson, and Jesus of Nazareth
- damn

It's strange, because only in my dreams am I passionate
-thats crazy

ay' that endin' was kinda morbid bro haha...

started real strong...wish the tempo of rhymes stayed that fast paced but Still really enjoyed this...
some creative linez in there....
keep em' bangin'!

DexLabb · 08-15-2014, 10:50 AM

sorry bro but did u just claim to be jesus of nazarath? oooh i know now why you have that god complex friend. anyway, just to be sure i am feeding and not freeing, so

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Nah, I'm kidding, well not really...I dunno, damn....fuck.

feelin that!

Witty · 08-18-2014, 05:15 PM

Yeah I kinda got bored towards the end, as stated in the piece itself, lack of inspiration and whatnot.

Thanks guys, will be returning feed.

Vulgar · 08-23-2014, 08:40 PM

I don't adhere to antiquated schemes like a classicist. It's strange, because only in my dreams am I passionate, in real life I'm cold, calculating, seen as an analyst....I'm lonely, fuck, my only crutch is this weed so I leannnn on the cannabis. If you look into my soul you'll see a philanthropist but if you keep digging deeper you'll find the disease that I battle with, nationalist greed for me was the catalyst to say 'fuck the world', because I hate the killers but I don't believe in the activists.

^Have to agree with Pancakey about the last line. Really good section!

Split · 08-25-2014, 11:32 AM

I'm bleeding, a masochist who believes in peace with an asterisk, what I mean is I feel like a pacifist but there's anger in me that will never leave, and it's cancerous, but I'm a cross between Thor, Charles Manson, and Jesus of Nazareth, except if it was me I wouldn't have helped that piece of shit Lazarus "You're dead and STILL want my help? Nah, deal with it, faggot bitch"...and I'm sorry if this seems a bit blasphemous, but I don't believe in that magic shit, I don't adhere to antiquated schemes like a classicist. It's strange, because only in my dreams am I passionate, in real life I'm cold, calculating, seen as an analyst....I'm lonely, fuck, my only crutch is this weed so I leannnn on the cannabis. If you look into my soul you'll see a philanthropist but if you keep digging deeper you'll find the disease that I battle with, nationalist greed for me was the catalyst to say 'fuck the world', because I hate the killers but I don't believe in the activists

Jesus. Fucking nasty throughout. Cool how it was strung together, schemes never slipped & it was very fluid. I wanted more chaotic rhymes though lol. Like, it got a little caught up in one rhythm, and needed to be broken up a bit more.

minor qualms on a really dope piece.

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Nah, I'm kidding, well not really...I dunno, damn....fuck

hate when people do this in their drops. fillerfillerfiller lel

doesn't matter had text

e11even · 08-26-2014, 05:14 AM

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Originally Posted by El Pancake

"I hate the killers but I don't believe in the activists."

awesome

This line hit the hardest, but this whole joint was prototype kush bro. Sick shit. I havent been disappointed yet. Keep up the shiny work. I will commit to going hard enough to at least matching this one of these days but eh. Good shit tho.

Bodey · 08-26-2014, 06:19 PM

This is the shit that I love. Entertaining w words, smiled a couple times readin this. Loved the classicist/analyst and the bars that came after that little section, it was great. This piece was one of those things that you can't just quote a few things, I really liked the whole thing. That asterisk part was witty, liked how you put that too. Wish it went on

08-14-2014, 06:53 PM	#1
Witty Lime Life Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 16,978 Battle Record: 30-41 Accomplishments - Only Slightly Retarded Champed - Lyric Olympics - Summer Classic Rep Power: 85235118	Sometimes I like to write about my feels... ....but this isn't one of those times, this is one of those rhymes that'll make you kick a pregnant bitch in the stomach til the ugly hoe dies and you can see the fetus juice leaking under those thighs, this that thunderdome style, we're dueling with this rhymin' shit, I'm mad max, you're a student of this violent wit. The evilest bastid with the demons to match it, shit, I'm bleeding, a masochist who believes in peace with an asterisk, what I mean is I feel like a pacifist but there's anger in me that will never leave, and it's cancerous, but I'm a cross between Thor, Charles Manson, and Jesus of Nazareth, except if it was me I wouldn't have helped that piece of shit Lazarus "You're dead and STILL want my help? Nah, deal with it, faggot bitch"...and I'm sorry if this seems a bit blasphemous, but I don't believe in that magic shit, I don't adhere to antiquated schemes like a classicist. It's strange, because only in my dreams am I passionate, in real life I'm cold, calculating, seen as an analyst....I'm lonely, fuck, my only crutch is this weed so I leannnn on the cannabis. If you look into my soul you'll see a philanthropist but if you keep digging deeper you'll find the disease that I battle with, nationalist greed for me was the catalyst to say 'fuck the world', because I hate the killers but I don't believe in the activists. I'm still young, the book of my life just opened, so why do I feel like I'm on the last scene of the manuscript? Nah, I'm kidding, well not really...I dunno, damn....fuck. Go lick an old man's nuts and the two of you hold hands, slut. Just random lines to pass the time, I've mastered rhymes and now I'm bored so I'll rape a drunk bitch and smash her spine, choke her to death with a rubber dick while I fuck her in the ass with mine, the craziest, laziest, haziest, mind...dunno if I'm coming or going, but if I'm cummin'....saying I didn't know she was underage won't save me this time. __________________ He listens to voices inside of his mind Explicit and poisonous violent crime.

08-15-2014, 12:33 AM	#3
CopyPat Mic Check Join Date: Mar 2013 Location: Calgary Alberta Canada Posts: 708 Battle Record: 13-10 Rep Power: 3742225	hahah i liked this. the jesus of nazareth shit was sick. i actually didnt like when i switched it up at the end. the old mans nuts scheme was deec too but then u switched that one right away into another that clearly wasn't as good as the first few. overall solid though. was entertaining to read and flow was nice. good shit witty. you should post more and cypher with us on aim wtf. get aim, u have aim? __________________ My syllable count approximately a billion, bounce. You cannot compete.

08-15-2014, 12:51 AM	#4
PancakeBrah SOBER Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 12,480 Battle Record: 2-5 Champed - AOWL Season 2 Rep Power: 85899407	"I hate the killers but I don't believe in the activists." awesome __________________ Netcees 2025 Revivalist Movement Founder

08-18-2014, 05:15 PM	#7
Witty Lime Life Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 16,978 Battle Record: 30-41 Accomplishments - Only Slightly Retarded Champed - Lyric Olympics - Summer Classic Rep Power: 85235118	Yeah I kinda got bored towards the end, as stated in the piece itself, lack of inspiration and whatnot. Thanks guys, will be returning feed. __________________ He listens to voices inside of his mind Explicit and poisonous violent crime.

08-14-2014, 07:24 PM	#2
Zen Arm the Homeless Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,102 Battle Record: 22-24 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 35079722	I tried to quote it on my phone but my phone's stupid, but the manuscript line was the best of this. That gave me them feels, brah. The rhyming was the star out of all if this though, specifically the first half. Great flow to that section even though I felt it started to fall off after the manuscript line. This was still very good though, but I do enjoy the feels especially the last one you wrote. Good to see you dropping, Witty.

08-15-2014, 06:58 AM	#5
Kin Kill.It.Nonstop Join Date: Jun 2014 Posts: 666 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 662201	but I'm a cross between Thor, Charles Manson, and Jesus of Nazareth - damn It's strange, because only in my dreams am I passionate -thats crazy ay' that endin' was kinda morbid bro haha... started real strong...wish the tempo of rhymes stayed that fast paced but Still really enjoyed this... some creative linez in there.... keep em' bangin'!

08-23-2014, 08:40 PM	#8
Vulgar Razor-thin derision Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,422 Battle Record: 40-25 Accomplishments - OM HOF Champed - Fight Night LIV - Gimmick Battle League (2x) - Write Week II - Art of Writing League - Storytelling And Topical Invitational Tournament - STI - Haiku Writer Challenge - GWL Picture Challenge(2x) Rep Power: 49604320	I don't adhere to antiquated schemes like a classicist. It's strange, because only in my dreams am I passionate, in real life I'm cold, calculating, seen as an analyst....I'm lonely, fuck, my only crutch is this weed so I leannnn on the cannabis. If you look into my soul you'll see a philanthropist but if you keep digging deeper you'll find the disease that I battle with, nationalist greed for me was the catalyst to say 'fuck the world', because I hate the killers but I don't believe in the activists. ^Have to agree with Pancakey about the last line. Really good section!