BROKE METHNAR [VS] Karpnados [Karpnados WINS]

Certain · 08-14-2014, 08:58 PM

Karpnados: I don't get your name. I liked the opener: All three elements (Strikta, "go for BROKE" and "smoke Meth") were played, but weaving them together seamlessly was smart. The fat Meth lines were pretty mediocre and generic fat lines. The Juno line was weird and offbeat and very much in your style, from the verses I've read. I liked it for that. The hat line was decent enough, as was the closer. There were no great lines, but there were a smattering of good ones. And the verse was mostly written well enough.

BROKE METHNAR: That opening setup was so fucking @Meth. Shut up, Meth. You should have let BROKE LESNAR write the whole verse. I used a Destroyer/Battleship line in an Open Mic verse like a year ago. I'm being mean, but it's just because Meth is involved. The Battleship and David Lama's house lines were good enough, and the Soundclips line was OK enough. It was weird to team with BROKE LESNAR and then call someone else a private detective. Meth's an idiot. I disliked the last line a lot. It seemed like it was trying to be good but wasn't clever at all. Also, it was Mike Wrecka's goldfish. This verse really didn't have much that interested me, though.

Vote: Karpnados

08-14-2014, 08:58 PM	#6
Certain Mad fucking dangerous. Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 12,066 Battle Record: 40-19 Champed - AOWL Season 3 - Art of Writing League (2x) Rep Power: 85899406	Karpnados: I don't get your name. I liked the opener: All three elements (Strikta, "go for BROKE" and "smoke Meth") were played, but weaving them together seamlessly was smart. The fat Meth lines were pretty mediocre and generic fat lines. The Juno line was weird and offbeat and very much in your style, from the verses I've read. I liked it for that. The hat line was decent enough, as was the closer. There were no great lines, but there were a smattering of good ones. And the verse was mostly written well enough. BROKE METHNAR: That opening setup was so fucking @Meth. Shut up, Meth. You should have let BROKE LESNAR write the whole verse. I used a Destroyer/Battleship line in an Open Mic verse like a year ago. I'm being mean, but it's just because Meth is involved. The Battleship and David Lama's house lines were good enough, and the Soundclips line was OK enough. It was weird to team with BROKE LESNAR and then call someone else a private detective. Meth's an idiot. I disliked the last line a lot. It seemed like it was trying to be good but wasn't clever at all. Also, it was Mike Wrecka's goldfish. This verse really didn't have much that interested me, though. Vote: Karpnados __________________ I'm just swinging swords strictly based on keyboards, unbalanced like elephants and ants on seesaws.