Greed vs. Blanco Bishop - Blanco Bishop wins

Certain · 08-12-2014, 10:58 PM

Blanco Bishop: This was a good punchline, more braggadocio than punch. But the setup was garbage, especially rhyming off "yo." And I don't understand the decision to put the spaces in "seriously" like that.

Greed: That concept is great, but it was completely misused because the setup and even first half of the second line didn't connect properly. Your wording was off and failed to make it feel like a punch as much as a witty turn of phrase that was unconnected to the battle concept.

Vote: Blanco Bishop

08-12-2014, 10:58 PM	#13
Certain Mad fucking dangerous. Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 12,066 Battle Record: 40-19 Champed - AOWL Season 3 - Art of Writing League (2x) Rep Power: 85899406	Blanco Bishop: This was a good punchline, more braggadocio than punch. But the setup was garbage, especially rhyming off "yo." And I don't understand the decision to put the spaces in "seriously" like that. Greed: That concept is great, but it was completely misused because the setup and even first half of the second line didn't connect properly. Your wording was off and failed to make it feel like a punch as much as a witty turn of phrase that was unconnected to the battle concept. Vote: Blanco Bishop __________________ I'm just swinging swords strictly based on keyboards, unbalanced like elephants and ants on seesaws.