R2: Seymour Butts vs. Peter McPuffington - [Flawless Ass 8-0]

Template · 08-10-2014, 05:30 AM

ok ok seymour butts lulz name gives you an early lead in the voting. theres cool shit in this verse fareal deal holyfield. your style is like a throwback to open mics from back in the day with the fantasy elements and focus on multis and strong rhymes. mommy like. you kill it atmospherically too. I prob won't be the only person to say this but game of thrones anyone? right? right. obv compliment is obv. embodiment of the topic was strong too, more of a storytelling vibe to it so surface level representation of good and evil worked. only thing I didn't like was the names of shit tbh, which is weird cuz they help build the atmosphere but some of them were plopped in there no explanation or anything, like if your friend just rolls up to the crib and shits and leaves, wipe or no wipe you'd be like wtf? gotta explain yourself, even when it's a standard shit. that's just how I feel. this verse was way better than shit though, so I would've liked something to make me be like "Olga Gjoesulde, right, who else could it be?" ticky-tack foul tho, didn't make a difference at the buzzer.

Peter McPuffington slightly less lulz name but the allusion to a boner is def appreciated so its tied up now. Tesla gets cool points whenevs so good call on that. I like the painting of edison as the evil and tesla as the good, like yin and yang of electricity. very gewd very gewd. but idk, this verse didn't feel encompassing like seymour's. it felt like you were setting a stage for a while, realized you weren't advancing the actual story, and then you did a quick synopsis of shit and THE END. the story never really got nailed down into something, the driving force of the message felt stunted. could've been STUNTIN. but you just didn't cover enough imo, and then it ended.

vote: seymour butts

08-10-2014, 05:30 AM	#4
Template Member Join Date: Jul 2014 Posts: 52 Rep Power: 0	ok ok seymour butts lulz name gives you an early lead in the voting. theres cool shit in this verse fareal deal holyfield. your style is like a throwback to open mics from back in the day with the fantasy elements and focus on multis and strong rhymes. mommy like. you kill it atmospherically too. I prob won't be the only person to say this but game of thrones anyone? right? right. obv compliment is obv. embodiment of the topic was strong too, more of a storytelling vibe to it so surface level representation of good and evil worked. only thing I didn't like was the names of shit tbh, which is weird cuz they help build the atmosphere but some of them were plopped in there no explanation or anything, like if your friend just rolls up to the crib and shits and leaves, wipe or no wipe you'd be like wtf? gotta explain yourself, even when it's a standard shit. that's just how I feel. this verse was way better than shit though, so I would've liked something to make me be like "Olga Gjoesulde, right, who else could it be?" ticky-tack foul tho, didn't make a difference at the buzzer. Peter McPuffington slightly less lulz name but the allusion to a boner is def appreciated so its tied up now. Tesla gets cool points whenevs so good call on that. I like the painting of edison as the evil and tesla as the good, like yin and yang of electricity. very gewd very gewd. but idk, this verse didn't feel encompassing like seymour's. it felt like you were setting a stage for a while, realized you weren't advancing the actual story, and then you did a quick synopsis of shit and THE END. the story never really got nailed down into something, the driving force of the message felt stunted. could've been STUNTIN. but you just didn't cover enough imo, and then it ended. vote: seymour butts