"Still Trippin"

Zen · 03-28-2013, 04:24 PM

I love the rhyme scheme you have here. It's kind of a similar style with mine and imo it helps the flow run a hell of a lot smoother and makes each line roll straight off your tongue so props to that. Some of the multis were kinda blah to me like these lines:
Now it's the same ol' song all the cocaine's gone but at least my flow game strong...
I'm hittin' propane bongs, shit, I was breakin bad way before the show came on!...
Idk that just felt kinda typical rap shit to me you know what I mean? But literally besides those lines there was really nothing bad I could say about this except maybe expand your vocabulary. Good piece man.

03-28-2013, 04:24 PM	#2
Zen Arm the Homeless Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,102 Battle Record: 22-24 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 35079722	I love the rhyme scheme you have here. It's kind of a similar style with mine and imo it helps the flow run a hell of a lot smoother and makes each line roll straight off your tongue so props to that. Some of the multis were kinda blah to me like these lines: Now it's the same ol' song all the cocaine's gone but at least my flow game strong... I'm hittin' propane bongs, shit, I was breakin bad way before the show came on!... Idk that just felt kinda typical rap shit to me you know what I mean? But literally besides those lines there was really nothing bad I could say about this except maybe expand your vocabulary. Good piece man.