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08-03-2014, 08:08 PM
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i think this was dope. impressive rhyming, particularly in the first part.
IMO you should have put a space or dash between goosepimples ("goose pimples" or "goose-pimples") to help show the rhyme with "roots in her".. "tweeter turns into the seashore" is a tongue twister, but i that's partly cuz i suck, so after a few tries it was OK... but those are minor issues, as i believe it was well done. Last edited by Pharaohs Army; 08-03-2014 at 08:15 PM. |
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