SpokenVsWritten Battle Verse

UnbornBuddha · 08-02-2014, 04:26 AM

The verses did not mixed well. The collaboration almost seems as if its two different pieces altogether. I say this because of the content presented, it does not fit together. The first verse was more a narrative reflecting on the ghostly apparition, and their otherworldly cosmological representation. The last verse was more of a pompous showboating on the grandness of self.
Anyways, in terms of the content I think this was a nice read. I enjoyed the first verse more though. Decapitator's verse had a lack of substance, and originality.

08-02-2014, 04:26 AM	#3
UnbornBuddha Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2014 Posts: 1,008 Battle Record: 23-10 Champed - Art of Writing League - AOWL Season 5 Rep Power: 23856379	The verses did not mixed well. The collaboration almost seems as if its two different pieces altogether. I say this because of the content presented, it does not fit together. The first verse was more a narrative reflecting on the ghostly apparition, and their otherworldly cosmological representation. The last verse was more of a pompous showboating on the grandness of self. Anyways, in terms of the content I think this was a nice read. I enjoyed the first verse more though. Decapitator's verse had a lack of substance, and originality.