the Portrait of Dr. Cenotaph

[Zen]

Originally Posted by Paradigm

Genocide is bottomless... exorcise what knowledge is
Chills up your proverbial spine from the Seven Tribes of Novelists

I feel like the first line is especially relevant right now in today's society #freepalestine

Agreed.

I always like reading your verses because afterwards I feel smarter, sort of like I just read a few classic from World Lit II that was then condensed down to thirty something lines. And it rhymes which makes it even cooler lol

The first stanza's flow was on point, especially when you added some inner rhymes like the heel raising tension line. That line was dope. My favorite stanza though was the second one. "My tailbone beat me to the stairs" is dope as fuck, but really I could tell by the end of it you had hit your stride around the area that Paradigm quoted. Those lines floated off the tongue with no effort whatsoever. Got dat butter flow, nawmsaying?

But if I had to critique something it's that I don't really know what this is all about. I have an idea, but I smoked allot of pot last night so it's probably wrong lol. The way I saw it is that this Dr. Cenotaph is dying so he's getting fucked up and thinking on life. Well to be more accurate the history of mankind and see's that history is written by dead men who died for a "cause".
Genocide is bottomless... exorcise what knowledge is

I identified my targets as viceroy relics, slain and shot

A false estimation which may differ in each country
it's no wonder the skeleton of our generation speaks bluntly
^^Those were the lines that made me think that.

Like I said, I might be wrong and mostly likely am. Still, I enjoyed this as always. Keep dropping Vulgar.