The Alchemy of Anatomy

Half Wit It · 07-25-2014, 08:51 PM

I liked some of your bars..but honestly you went too far with the wording. Spitting dope shit is as much about lyrics as it is about conveying your ideas effortlessly. Some of your material seemed complex solely for the sake of being so. Drawn out at times, even. My advice is disregard unnecessary details. You don't have to break down every bar to its bear essentials. Leaves no wow-factor for the reader. Clearly you have skills. Condense everything.

07-25-2014, 08:51 PM	#3
Half Wit It Nalyubuites Join Date: Jun 2014 Posts: 449 Battle Record: 1-2 Rep Power: 4465335	I liked some of your bars..but honestly you went too far with the wording. Spitting dope shit is as much about lyrics as it is about conveying your ideas effortlessly. Some of your material seemed complex solely for the sake of being so. Drawn out at times, even. My advice is disregard unnecessary details. You don't have to break down every bar to its bear essentials. Leaves no wow-factor for the reader. Clearly you have skills. Condense everything. __________________