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@ribbit - please work on your structure as well as end rhymes, bro. I mean, you hardly rhymed anything. Not sure what type of accent you have, but...
Pop shit/Coffin - Do not rhyme Locksmith/Dog shit - The smith/shit's a near rhyme but comes off awkward Quote:
And your closer really didn't make much sense to me, tbr. With that being said, I'm not trying to come off as a dick but this verses was pretty terrible, IMO. Work on structuring your bars/lines in a better format because it caused issues while reading, from a readers perspective. I had a hard time trying to follow a flow not to mention, your end rhymes were off as well so I couldn't find any type of flow. Concepts were weak/not effective, just an overall pretty bad verse. vs Hunts had an OK'ish verse. Nothing really WOW'd me but you had a few attempts. I liked the concepts on your name flip attempts but feel the executions could have been worded in more of a harsher manner. Quote:
Overall: IMO, this battle was pretty one sided as ribbit had nothing vs the 2 quotes I got from HUNTS which were his best bars out of the entire verse. So with that being said... v/K Huntsman |
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