quantitative laser jets cloud the sky with blood

[big baby]

@Amen @Velocity you guys ass compared 2 bug baby

who wanna swag and flow with cashius' soul. Have a sit down with galactus ghost. Then spit clouds to recreate this battle clone with braggin rights'. you've met the boss, I handle nice. with SIX rounds get sent to haunt the afterlife. it's megatron, you're half as nice, you're cinderella, i'm castle mice. My connections? raw, even salmonella could catch a cold; infectious smog. Confess to god, you're wack alright? My mantles woven. Adamantite. You're super wack, velocity, try and spar with this uber rad monstrosity. perfect timing, you virgin hymen, it's like you knew that bags was logging in? And we got dudes like titular Amen, who have stupid gay shit in their avatar signatures saying "rest in piece(ez) like he had to explain his shit up in laymens. You're lame man, youve been a joke, you take time to explain your avatar, but leave some shitty votes, like city folk for senator. I'm a minotaur with a license to kill, try cracking my gauntlet, you're wackness. you should have a license to fish for sanitation cause all you're casting is garbage, you faggot, get off it. and talkin bout casting, we could leave you in a portable cast for your carnival casket, then rape your face. leave you swimming with the fishes when I hit you with a hook, if you take the bait. and your swag and flows probably gay okay like "ILL KAMEHAMEHA WAVE YOUR FACE WITH LASER BLADES FROM RAZOR WAYANS AND DAMONS PACE LIKE MAJOR PAY" you'll get defaced & grated, then laid to waste, degraded stained with A1-steak you paper plate. Oh you're from RAPBATTLES? What a lovely story. You're fucking corny, how are you a reserve for a reserve for a reserve in the Summer tourney? You stupid cocky geek, that's like playing fourth string for Junior Varsity. I love the gory, scrumptious war scene. I'll thrust the rusty warped beam down your jug, in and out till the blood is pouring and I'm fucking horny. Then rip the doubt from your tongue, and dig it four feet, with excessive gloom. I don't feel remorse. Then go Yoda on your entry wound, so you could feel the force. Homie. The reason I don't enter S&F and try, cause I care less about your intensive sweltered rhymes. My state farms 15% of your organs, and sells it for profit, now that's a Progressive stride. Come and step aside the collective mind of bug baby, this fucks crazy. My puns bangin, your puns stopped working out in 1999, died a year later cause your puns lazy. WoohOo Hoo hooWooHoo call Vonage, the god monster, block stomper, COD squaddeer vs the cock gobbler, cock goblin, Mr Cock. Cocklin. You beating me? Bitch thats highly impossible, even if PIGS fly, when I pull out the crotch rocket and speed off in a high speed chase with a cop chopper. GET IT??!!? I'd go so fast, I'd be in the future where my mind cre-ates a live deep space. You live in the present. And by present.... I mean, hey, I got you a nice knee brace. Faggot

[Wise Wiggles]

oOo Boi I gets dem wets son fa'real for reals mah nigga

[gitto138]

Yo man tis shit is art, You beating me? Bitch thats highly impossible, even if PIGS fly, when I pull out the crotch rocket and speed off in a high speed chase with a cop chopper,, my fav piece, dope fire dude

[Certain]

who wanna swag and flow with cashius' soul. Have a sit down with galactus ghost. Then spit clouds to recreate this battle clone with braggin rights'. you've met the boss, I handle nice. with SIX rounds get sent to haunt the afterlife.

I didn't really like this part. It wasn't particularly witty or harsh and lacked your normal creativity.

it's megatron, you're half as nice, you're cinderella, i'm castle mice. My connections? raw, even salmonella could catch a cold; infectious smog. Confess to god, you're wack alright? My mantles woven. Adamantite.

The Cinderella twist was about the only thing here that worked for me.

You're super wack, velocity, try and spar with this uber rad monstrosity. perfect timing, you virgin hymen, it's like you knew that bags was logging in? And we got dudes like titular Amen, who have stupid gay shit in their avatar signatures saying "rest in piece(ez) like he had to explain his shit up in laymens. You're lame man, youve been a joke, you take time to explain your avatar, but leave some shitty votes, like city folk for senator.

We've picked up steam. The rhymes remain impressive, but you've got some content in here. The last part was particularly strong.

I'm a minotaur with a license to kill, try cracking my gauntlet, you're wackness. you should have a license to fish for sanitation cause all you're casting is garbage, you faggot, get off it. and talkin bout casting, we could leave you in a portable cast for your carnival casket, then rape your face. leave you swimming with the fishes when I hit you with a hook, if you take the bait.

This was the best part so far. The fishing continuation made for a nice read, and the anger was palpable. Plus there were numerous clever twists in here.

and your swag and flows probably gay okay like "ILL KAMEHAMEHA WAVE YOUR FACE WITH LASER BLADES FROM RAZOR WAYANS AND DAMONS PACE LIKE MAJOR PAY" you'll get defaced & grated, then laid to waste, degraded stained with A1-steak you paper plate. Oh you're from RAPBATTLES? What a lovely story. You're fucking corny, how are you a reserve for a reserve for a reserve in the Summer tourney? You stupid cocky geek, that's like playing fourth string for Junior Varsity.

The last line made me laugh. Plus the flow and anger is really picking up as this goes on.

I love the gory, scrumptious war scene. I'll thrust the rusty warped beam down your jug, in and out till the blood is pouring and I'm fucking horny. Then rip the doubt from your tongue, and dig it four feet, with excessive gloom. I don't feel remorse. Then go Yoda on your entry wound, so you could feel the force. Homie.

Ehh, you backed off the personal attack here and made it feel too horrorcore. I mean, it was good horrorcore. Whatever that's worth.

The reason I don't enter S&F and try, cause I care less about your intensive sweltered rhymes. My state farms 15% of your organs, and sells it for profit, now that's a Progressive stride. Come and step aside the collective mind of bug baby, this fucks crazy. My puns bangin, your puns stopped working out in 1999, died a year later cause your puns lazy.

This was better, but it's starting to feel like all you have right now is anger and not much content.

WoohOo Hoo hooWooHoo call Vonage, the god monster, block stomper, COD squaddeer vs the cock gobbler, cock goblin, Mr Cock. Cocklin.

I laughed.

You beating me? Bitch thats highly impossible, even if PIGS fly, when I pull out the crotch rocket and speed off in a high speed chase with a cop chopper. GET IT??!!? I'd go so fast, I'd be in the future where my mind cre-ates a live deep space. You live in the present. And by present.... I mean, hey, I got you a nice knee brace. Faggot

This was an OK ending.

I think your style works much better for disses than traditional battles because of the anger and aggressive rhyming you can show. You're Tommy Hearns, not Floyd Mayweather Jr. You need to come out furious. I thought the best stuff was the most specific stuff, which generally is how I feel about battle and dis verses. But in this case, you didn't have the punchlines to attack in more generic settings. Still, this was an enjoyable read.

[ill nik-A]

Lol

[Strikta]

Originally Posted by ill nik-A

Lol

[PancakeBrah]

These niggas don't even know.

Get 'em

[Alpha Male Jim Sanchez]

lol

[Alpha Male Jim Sanchez]

Originally Posted by ill nik-A

Lol

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[Camp Bell]

You're fucking corny, how are you a reserve for a reserve for a reserve in the Summer tourney? You stupid cocky geek, that's like playing fourth string for Junior Varsity. I love the gory, scrumptious war scene. I'll thrust the rusty warped beam down your jug, in and out till the blood is pouring and I'm fucking horny.


LMAOOOOOOZIPEMUP

[Zen]

big baby spirit bomb

[Geno]

I see murder like master p brother

[Friend Zone Fred Zim]

is this bags this shit was trash!!!!!!!!

[Fig]

You use the word cock too much in this piece.

there can never be too much

[big baby]

next alias that posts in here will get ousted. I know who you fucking fags are. @Friend Zone Fred Zim @JESODIST @Alpha Male Jim Sanchez

[Friend Zone Fred Zim]

who am I FAGGOT

[Alpha Male Jim Sanchez]

tell me my name.

say my name, baby.

[NYCSPITZ]

this shit was flames flow imo

[big baby]

Justin, you're not clever with your guises, as you've also used seymour butts as an alias on previous sites. Refrain from embarrassing yourself.

[UnbornBuddha]

You have a very funny name.
As for the verse, it 's well crafted. It's not my cup of tea, but it's definitely comes from a skilled mind. Though it will be nice if it wasn't a big paragraph. I read it, but I will be honest, and say my niche, my forte isn't battle rapping or horror core. So with that in mind I will say at times this lacked a conceptually interwoven factor, and seemed less inspired.
But either way the rhymes were good, and it had that edginess that is required in this types of pieces. Thank you for the material. Have a good one.