AOWL Week 6: c.d.m (2-3) VS. Zenland (2-3) [ZENLAND WINS, 8-3.]

PancakeBrah · 03-25-2013, 11:01 PM

ZenLand-

I thought I was going to hate this after the first few lines but you really have a knack for strong rhyming. That whole blues and cotton scheme was worded perfectly, read it a couple times. Fun to read. Instilled and mashed, mashed specifically, was forced. Your content was just okay, to me. Guitar and pick and cart of cigs was excellent. Perfect little rhyme. Robert Johnson, ok. you could've put any seminal musician, really (except Vampire Weekend, mirite!), and it would have worked. Maybe there were some personal allusions for Mr. Johnson I'm just not up to date on, but that's pretty irrelevant. Medium paragraph story short, you had a lot of cool rhymes that kept me interested but your content was just okay.

Veritas-

Faux deep is cool. There were some cool couplets. This just seemed like your boarding habits, a bit forced meanwhile just solid with the expectations raised by your persona. Shit was just okay and spacing the couplets just gives the whole piece a false sense of import and turns me off. Honestly expected to vote for you prior to entering the battle. But the content was expected, as well. Although that begets the whole "what hasn't been done before blah blah blah blah blah" argument, but whatever.

Zero Dark Thirty was better than Argo.

Such as Zenland was better than Veritas. both were bleh content to me, Zenland entertained me more.

03-25-2013, 11:01 PM	#16
PancakeBrah SOBER Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 12,480 Battle Record: 2-5 Champed - AOWL Season 2 Rep Power: 85899407	ZenLand- I thought I was going to hate this after the first few lines but you really have a knack for strong rhyming. That whole blues and cotton scheme was worded perfectly, read it a couple times. Fun to read. Instilled and mashed, mashed specifically, was forced. Your content was just okay, to me. Guitar and pick and cart of cigs was excellent. Perfect little rhyme. Robert Johnson, ok. you could've put any seminal musician, really (except Vampire Weekend, mirite!), and it would have worked. Maybe there were some personal allusions for Mr. Johnson I'm just not up to date on, but that's pretty irrelevant. Medium paragraph story short, you had a lot of cool rhymes that kept me interested but your content was just okay. Veritas- Faux deep is cool. There were some cool couplets. This just seemed like your boarding habits, a bit forced meanwhile just solid with the expectations raised by your persona. Shit was just okay and spacing the couplets just gives the whole piece a false sense of import and turns me off. Honestly expected to vote for you prior to entering the battle. But the content was expected, as well. Although that begets the whole "what hasn't been done before blah blah blah blah blah" argument, but whatever. Zero Dark Thirty was better than Argo. Such as Zenland was better than Veritas. both were bleh content to me, Zenland entertained me more. __________________ Netcees 2025 Revivalist Movement Founder