AOWL Week 6: c.d.m (2-3) VS. Zenland (2-3) [ZENLAND WINS, 8-3.]

Cereal_Killa · 03-25-2013, 05:05 PM

Zen:
:) nice, simple but direct and oh so smooth.. very fitting.. I really love his story tbh you didn’t really do it complete justice in the way of content but you did scratch the surface which was enough.. Im assuming due to time restraints you didn’t go in depth on his story cause there is so much to this.. This verse had warmth, heart and of course soul which was beautiful to read.. I really do admire the urban legend of the devils trade and your link to the topic couldn’t have been more perfect.. Flow cool, vocab cool, structure nice in the end compared to what I’ve read from you this was toned down but still a wonderful piece.. Good looks.

"And it's grown and grown, But a home ain't a home when it's filled with trash"

real nice..

c-d-m:
Poetic, rhythmic and inspiring.. At the last bar with some final words of wisdom you brought light.. I liked this piece, didn’t really love the structure with the bar for bar break up but still the overall piece was tight. Your wording was strong in meaning but of soft description so they rolled through my mind like water.. Dude cool drop

“No one looks past my surface, or the service I provide
To keep you safe from nature when its borders and mine collide”

^ I love this delicate image soo much

Vote = zenland

This has been the hardest to vote on purely cause one was all story where the other was a sync of beautiful images.. I personally tend to edge towards the verse which has a more developed story but this was hard in this case cause, c-d-m’s was like he captured my brain in a crystal globe of innocence and zen didn’t bring the inferno that should have come from that story.. Now don’t get me wrong what zen brought was amazing and imo enough to trump 13 bars of pretty pictures but the verse from other matches this week have been truly n utterly insane, so I am sorry for the harsh judgement.. You guys both still rocked this ish..

03-25-2013, 05:05 PM	#13
Cereal_Killa Licking Lily's.. Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 706 Battle Record: 11-6 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 3565733	Zen: :) nice, simple but direct and oh so smooth.. very fitting.. I really love his story tbh you didn’t really do it complete justice in the way of content but you did scratch the surface which was enough.. Im assuming due to time restraints you didn’t go in depth on his story cause there is so much to this.. This verse had warmth, heart and of course soul which was beautiful to read.. I really do admire the urban legend of the devils trade and your link to the topic couldn’t have been more perfect.. Flow cool, vocab cool, structure nice in the end compared to what I’ve read from you this was toned down but still a wonderful piece.. Good looks. "And it's grown and grown, But a home ain't a home when it's filled with trash" real nice.. c-d-m: Poetic, rhythmic and inspiring.. At the last bar with some final words of wisdom you brought light.. I liked this piece, didn’t really love the structure with the bar for bar break up but still the overall piece was tight. Your wording was strong in meaning but of soft description so they rolled through my mind like water.. Dude cool drop “No one looks past my surface, or the service I provide To keep you safe from nature when its borders and mine collide” ^ I love this delicate image soo much Vote = zenland This has been the hardest to vote on purely cause one was all story where the other was a sync of beautiful images.. I personally tend to edge towards the verse which has a more developed story but this was hard in this case cause, c-d-m’s was like he captured my brain in a crystal globe of innocence and zen didn’t bring the inferno that should have come from that story.. Now don’t get me wrong what zen brought was amazing and imo enough to trump 13 bars of pretty pictures but the verse from other matches this week have been truly n utterly insane, so I am sorry for the harsh judgement.. You guys both still rocked this ish.. __________________ You think YOU'RE sick I shit cough drops ..