AOWL Week 6: c.d.m (2-3) VS. Zenland (2-3) [ZENLAND WINS, 8-3.]

[IamBenT]

Great battle!

Zenland - Yo really liked the flow in this, great use of multis, very descriptive and made the road come alive both in the artist's life and metaphorically as a road he had to travel to be great. The allusion may be a bit obscure but I really appreciate verses like these that bring to light someone's life in a way only hip-hop can. there were a few rhyme errors that bothered me a bit, places where I felt you could clean up the word usage, tighten for our reading's sake, but i wanted MORE out of this verse interms of length actually, cuz it was a cool story.

c.d.m - I really like the very poetic vibe you took with this, powerful use of imagery, your scheme was solid for the most part until the end where you lost me a bit as your diction became a bit more vague, I really like the theme here of an endless road that suffers along with the travelers, that is kind of like watching and living it and kind of sadly forced to always participate in this.

Vote -zenland, i really liked BOTH verses actually and would have liked to see both get developed, but I feel Zenland's verse appealed to my sensibilities a bit more and had a refreshing ending to it.