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Zen · 06-08-2014, 01:10 PM

I don't know if this is how you intended it, but I read this a POV from the alien's point of view with the capitalized words being his mission or his status. The descriptive language was great and I could picture everything as you wrote. Like bb mentioned some lines were a little difficult to read, not because of the wording necessarily but because the syllable count was a little off. Still, this was a very cool read. Reminds me of the first pieces I read from you. Good stuff.

06-08-2014, 01:10 PM	#7
Zen Arm the Homeless Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,102 Battle Record: 22-24 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 35079722	I don't know if this is how you intended it, but I read this a POV from the alien's point of view with the capitalized words being his mission or his status. The descriptive language was great and I could picture everything as you wrote. Like bb mentioned some lines were a little difficult to read, not because of the wording necessarily but because the syllable count was a little off. Still, this was a very cool read. Reminds me of the first pieces I read from you. Good stuff.