End of Watch (w/ Zygote)

[Vulgar]

Nice work guys. Zygote, you've got a no pressure narrational style that's based on simple rhyme schemes and an almost scholarly, history channel-like tone, where you provide the scoop with little theatrics or stylization points. Which is cool and refreshing some of the time. I feel like you could be using more literary devices to spice things up though.

Brass Body, you are a good writer. I thought your diction was the highlight of the verse, like here:

The sign of a blood oath, if he's right, then our guns load,
tonight- we flood roads with the cries of corrupt rogues
^was a cool bar.

The sound of battle leaves me deaf, surrounded by shadows of death,
how will the gallows lead my steps, mounted by salvo and stress.
^Yup.

As a whole, this collab was alright. Both writers had their say and there was a satisfying outcome.

Keep doing you